考研英语二2011年大作文写作方向与示例

当你坐在考研英语二考场，面对2011年大作文题目的那一瞬间，是否能快速组织起一篇结构清晰、表达地道的高分文章？本文这篇批改例文，正是考研英语二作文真题话题下的标准范本，适合每一位考研英语备考生反复研读。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The chart illustrates that an increase has happened in the market share of the brands that consist of some types of cars in china during the past years. In 2008, the Chinese brand accounted for 25%, which was higher than the Japanese brands and lower than the American brands. Surpringly, the scale reached more than 30%, which was higher than other two brands.

Some factors that lead to the change can be summarized as follows. China has become extremely active in economy, which has led to the development of the production of the cars and the improvement of the technongy. The development of the foreign cars cannot catch up with the increased demand of people, which has obliged residents to choose the Chinese cars. The fact that the scale of the chinese cars can expand suggests that people can get the better experience in life.

It is my view that it is necessary for us to take effective measures to improve our ability to produce cars. We should absorb the virtues from other country"s brand and resist its dark side. Only in this way so can we promote the development of the technology in making cars and make people"s life wonderful.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：china

批改：专有名词首字母大写

原文：The chart illustrates that an increase has happened in the market share of the brands that consist of some types of cars in china during the past years. In 2008, the Chinese brand accounted for 25%, which was higher than the Japanese brands and lower than the American brands. Surpringly, the scale reached more than 30%, which was higher than other two brands.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：Some factors that lead to the change can be summarized as follows. China has become extremely active in economy, which has led to the development of the production of the cars and the improvement of the technongy. The development of the foreign cars cannot catch up with the increased demand of people, which has obliged residents to choose the Chinese cars. The fact that the scale of the chinese cars can expand suggests that people can get the better experience in life.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：t is my view that it is necessary for us to take effective measures to improve our ability to produce cars. We should absorb the virtues from other country"s brand and resist its dark side. Only in this way so can we promote the development of the technology in making cars and make people"s life wonderful.

批改：联系自身，总结全文，升华主题

原文：Surpringly

批改：Surprisingly

原文：technongy

批改：technology

原文：increased

批改：increasing

原文：chinese

批改：首字母大写

原文：so

批改：删除

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12 /15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

词汇：考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

内容：在第二段分析原因时，我们可以有两个选择，一是只分析中国品牌占比上升的原因，二是可以加上日本品牌占比下降的原因，关于日本品牌占比下降的原因，可以写日本品牌一些不当行为导致其声誉下降，进而影响其销量等原因。

整体来看，语言表达和语法基础上，进步的空间还很大。比如本次作文中出现多次的单词拼写错误等问题，会很拉低你的平均分。另外还需要注意一些基础的语法问题和表达搭配问题，有时间好好看看文中的批改，细心吸收，争取在接下来的练习中避免类似的错误。

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