考研英语二2011年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2011年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二写作技巧教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bat chart evidently depicts the changes in market shares of three brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. The percentage of Chinese brand had a high speed to accelerate from 25% to approximately 35%. In 2008,the proportion Japanese cars was approximately 35% ,but by 2009, this rate had substantially dropped to 25%. After a year of development, the percentage of American cars still stable and steady.

According informations from chart can be summarized. First,we evidently find that Chinese ability about manufacturing gradually develop to a high level. The consumers have strongly willing to purchase domestic car brands. Second, with

economic development, the market share of domestic car brands is further expanding .Especially, the core skills handle by ourselves.

It"s significant to gradually improve our core skills and the government hold relative policies to support. I"m confidence that the proportion of domestic brands will steady increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：bat

批改：bar

批改：加of

批改：加动词was

原文：he bat chart evidently depicts the changes in market shares of three brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. The percentage of Chinese brand had a high speed to accelerate from 25% to approximately 35%. In 2008,the proportion Japanese cars was approximately 35% ,but by 2009, this rate had substantially dropped to 25%. After a year of development, the percentage of American cars still stable and steady.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

批改：according to根据，增加to

原文：informations

批改：information不可数

批改：加逗号

原文：can

批改：前加several points

原文：develop

批改：单三develops

原文：have

批改：改成are，be willing to

原文：handle

批改：are handled被动

原文：According informations from chart can be summarized. First,we evidently find that Chinese ability about manufacturing gradually develop to a high level. The consumers have strongly willing to purchase domestic car brands. Second, with economic development, the market share of domestic car brands is further expanding .Especially, the core skills handle by ourselves.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词对图表中的现象进行分析论述，注意避免小的语言错误。

批改：加should

原文：support

批改：支持后面缺少宾语

原文：confidence

批改：改成形容词

原文：It"s significant to gradually improve our core skills and the government hold relative policies to support. I"m confidence that the proportion of domestic brands will steady increase in the following decades.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误，要注意名词的可数与不可数；句式方面，要注意句子结构的完整，不要缺少成分；语法方面，注意固定搭配的正确使用。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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