考研英语二2011年大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2011年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语二作文模板备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

As is numerically illustrated in the statistics, the percentage of the native car market share  increased from 25% to 32% between 2008 and 2009, while the percentage of foreign market share decreased from 35% to 25% between 2008 and 2009. From my perspective, the above figures do reflect a prevailing social tendency in contemporary society.

First and foremost, just as Karl Marx once said, the economic basis determines the superstructure. It is precisely the boosting comprehensive national strength of China that constitutes the precondition for the above-mentioned tendency. What’s more, the diversity of relevant population"s awareness is one of the contributing dynamics. For example, more and more people choose to believe in domestic industries, which reflects the level of China"s manufacturing industry is increasing in these years. In addition, social media platforms substantially facilitate the flow and intensification of certain awareness, thus accelerating the transition from an emerging phenomenon into the new reality.

In conclusion, the current tendency is of profound inherent rationality and inevitability, and will continue to exist in the foreseeable future. Correspondingly, as the vanguard and successor of our society, we should grasp the  pulse of this trend and actively meet whatever challenges and opportunities it may bring about.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：the native car market share 

批改：多个名词罗列时要使用of所有格，改成：the market share of native cars

原文：As is numerically illustrated in the statistics, the percentage of the native car market share  increased from 25% to 32% between 2008 and 2009, while the percentage of foreign market share decreased from 35% to 25% between 2008 and 2009. From my perspective, the above figures do reflect a prevailing social tendency in contemporary society.

批改：清晰简要地描述了图表信息，言简意赅。

原文：First and foremost, just as Karl Marx once said, the economic basis determines the superstructure. It is precisely the boosting comprehensive national strength of China that constitutes the precondition for the above-mentioned tendency. What’s more, the diversity of relevant population"s awareness is one of the contributing dynamics. For example, more and more people choose to believe in domestic industries, which reflects the level of China"s manufacturing industry is increasing in these years. In addition, social media platforms substantially facilitate the flow and intensification of certain awareness, thus accelerating the transition from an emerging phenomenon into the new reality.

批改：能够对图表内容进行论述分析，语言较为连贯。

原文：In conclusion, the current tendency is of profound inherent rationality and inevitability, and will continue to exist in the foreseeable future. Correspondingly, as the vanguard and successor of our society, we should grasp the  pulse of this trend and actively meet whatever challenges and opportunities it may bring about.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行分析总结并提出自己的建议。但如果能够进一步跟主题相联系会更好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，掌握较好，无拼写错误；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变；语法方面，注意多个名词罗列时可以使用of所有格结构。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。但是要注意论述内容和主题联系的紧密性，再接再厉。

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