考研英语二2016年大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2016年考研英语二大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie clearly displays the percentage breakdown of the survey of certain university students traveling purposes.Enjoying sightseeing takes the lead at 37%,followed by relieving stress at 33%.Additionally, factors such as making friends, cultivating independent ability and others are also considered,accounting for 9%,6% and 15%, respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society,university students are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue spiritual enjoyment. This explains why an increasing number of students choose to travel to enjoy scenery and release stress rather than buy cultural items.In addition,as the saying goes,"On life"s stage,pressure is always present." Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result,traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the pie is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：he pie clearly displays the percentage breakdown of the survey of certain university students traveling purposes.Enjoying sightseeing takes the lead at 37%,followed by relieving stress at 33%.Additionally, factors such as making friends, cultivating independent ability and others are also considered,accounting for 9%,6% and 15%, respectively.

批改：第一段完成了“解读图表”的核心任务，准确地列出了数据

原文：buy cultural items

批改：buy cultural items (购买文化物品) 这个对比点有点奇怪，与旅游目的的直接关联性不强。可以更直接地说明他们追求的是“体验”而非“物质”，比如 rather than spending on material goods

原文：e core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society,university students are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue spiritual enjoyment. This explains why an increasing number of students choose to travel to enjoy scenery and release stress rather than buy cultural items.In addition,as the saying goes,"On life"s stage,pressure is always present." Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result,traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the pie is unsurprising.

批改：本段尝试从“精神享受”和“学业压力”两个角度进行评论，思路好

原文：hat about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades

批改：结尾段对未来趋势做出了预

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12分

这篇作文整体框架完整，成功地完成了图表解读并给出了评论。你的优点在于拥有不错的词汇量，并能尝试使用复杂的句子结构，比如“serving as a microcosm...”这一句就写得非常漂亮！

主要的提升空间在于让表达更自然、更地道。有时候引入不太相关的对比（如“cultural items”）。记住，好的写作是清晰、准确的表达。这会对你有很大帮助。继续加油！

文章“解读图表-分析原因-展望未来”的三段式框架非常清晰，段落之间的衔接也做得不错，这是很大的优点！在内容推进上，如果分析原因时能更紧扣“学生”和“旅游”本身的特点，而不是引入“购买文化物品”这类稍远的对比，论述的逻辑性和说服力会更强。

总的来说，你已具备了写出优秀作文的潜力。

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