考研英语二2011年大作文失分点批改

本文整理了2011年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改例文，是备考考研英语作文真题范文的实用素材。考研英语作文在考研英语中占据重要分值，历年真题范文能够帮助考生快速把握命题规律与评分要点，下面让我们一同走进这篇批改范文。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the market shares of some brands in the domestic car market in 2008 and 2009. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese brands was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had risen to around 32% and had surpassed Japanese brands. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brands experienced a decline of about 7 percentage points during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s automotive manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1980s and 1990s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of Chinese consumers, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：语法正确

原文：7 percentage points

批改：改为 7% 即可，但是此处应该是 9% 更准确

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确，表达也很好

批改：语法正确

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

批改：结尾段内容表达不错，但是此处是动态图，结合图表变化情况，国产品牌的比例将在接下来的几十年里稳步增长。相比之下，日系品牌和美系品牌的比例可能会继续减少。 这样的预测更合理

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：不存在语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 细节问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心 2. 动态图的结尾段预测可结合变化情况来精准预测，结合段评修改，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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