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一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.
二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The bar chart clearly depicts the changes of population between urban area and countryside for twenty years in China. In 1990, the number of urban population was 300 million, but by 2010, this figure had substantially risen to 666 million. In contrast, the number of rural population experienced a significant decline of 160 million during the same period.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor ochestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound employment system, enabling citizens to have ample opportunities for seeking jobs. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this circumstance is the significant progress made by China"s urban infrastructure construction in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
What about future trands? I"m confident that the number of urban population will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the number of rural population will likely continue to decrease.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:The bar chart clearly depicts the changes of population between urban area and countryside for twenty years in China
批改:整体还可以,可增加具体的年份:优化后: The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in population in urban and rural areas of China over two decades (1990-2010).
原文:he number of rural population
批改:the number of urban population 搭配不当。population 是不可数集合名词,通常不说 “the number of population”,应改为 the urban population 直接作主语
原文: experienced a significant decline of 160 million during the same period.
批改:可以补充具体的数据,优化后: In contrast, the rural population dropped from 834 million to 674 million, experiencing a significant decline of 160 million during the same period.
原文:trands
批改: trands → trends,拼写错误
原文:he number of urban population
批改:主谓搭配: the number of urban/rural population 同样的问题,应直接使用 the urban/rural population。
原文:our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound employment system, enabling citizens to have ample opportunities for seeking jobs
批改:很不错,表达很流畅
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:12/15
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