考研英语二2016年大作文怎么写？附例文批改

正在备考考研英语的你，是否还在为2016年考研英语二大作文的写法犯愁？本文精选一篇高分组同学的批改例文，系统梳理考研英语作文话题的常考话题与写作框架。透过启航教育老师的逐段点评，你能直观感受高分作文的得分诀窍。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

What is clearly reflected in the pie chart is the percentage of the aim of traveling in certain university. According to the data, the percentage of people admiring the scenery and releasing stress were higher than those making new friends and developing independent skills. From my perspective, the above figures do reflect a prevailing social tendency in contemporary society.

First and foremost, just as Karl Marx once said, the economic basis determines the superstructure. It is precisely the boosting comprehensive national strength of China that constitutes the precondition for the above-mentioned tendency. What’s more, the diversity of relevant population"s preferences is one of the contributing dynamics. For example, outgoing people may like to make new friends during the trip, while quiet people may like to enjoy themselves along the way so that release stress. In addition, social media platforms substantially facilitate the popular tendency of traveling that appealing more and more youngsters to join, which could make them enjoy the meaning of life.

In conclusion, the current tendency is of profound inherent rationality and inevitability, and will continue to exist in the foreseeable future. Correspondingly, as the vanguard and successor of our society, we should grasp the  pulse of this trend and actively meet whatever challenges and opportunities it may bring about.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：people

批改：students更符合主题

原文：What is clearly reflected in the pie chart is the percentage of the aim of traveling in certain university. According to the data, the percentage of people admiring the scenery and releasing stress were higher than those making new friends and developing independent skills. From my perspective, the above figures do reflect a prevailing social tendency in contemporary society.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：population"s

批改：students"

原文：people

批改：students

原文：people

批改：students

原文：so that

批改：改成so as to，so that引导从句，后面要接句子，但是release stress不是从句

原文：appealing

批改：改成谓语appeals

原文：First and foremost, just as Karl Marx once said, the economic basis determines the superstructure. It is precisely the boosting comprehensive national strength of China that constitutes the precondition for the above-mentioned tendency. What’s more, the diversity of relevant population"s preferences is one of the contributing dynamics. For example, outgoing people may like to make new friends during the trip, while quiet people may like to enjoy themselves along the way so that release stress. In addition, social media platforms substantially facilitate the popular tendency of traveling that appealing more and more youngsters to join, which could make them enjoy the meaning of life.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因，全面细致。

原文：In conclusion, the current tendency is of profound inherent rationality and inevitability, and will continue to exist in the foreseeable future. Correspondingly, as the vanguard and successor of our society, we should grasp the  pulse of this trend and actively meet whatever challenges and opportunities it may bring about.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行分析总结，起到了点题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，单词的选取要注意和图表描述的主体相关；句式方面和语法方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变，但是要注意从句的正确使用以及从句中谓语的使用。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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