考研英语二2011年大作文失分点批改

本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2011年考研英语二大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文万能句型写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the percentage of some car brand markets in China during 2008 and 2009. In 2008, the percentage of Chinese brand was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 37%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a significant decline of about 9% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to improve the quality of domestic cars and reduce their prices, allowing consumers to choose them more willingly. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China’s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese and American brand will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：some car brand markets in China

批改：此处是国内市场某些汽车品牌的比例，不是市场的比例，改为 certain brands in the domestic car market

原文：brand

批改：可数名词单数形式不能单独存在，改为 brands

原文：37%

批改：注意数字要表达准确，此处改为 32%

原文：brand

批改：改为 brands

原文：brand

批改：改为 brands

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确，表达也很好

批改：语法正确

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

原文：brand

批改：改为 brands

原文：brand

批改：改为 brands

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 数字表达要细心，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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