考研英语一2011年大作文实例分析与批改

2011年考研英语一大作文围绕哪一类话题命题？本文精选的范文聚焦考研英语一作文范文话题方向，结合启航教育多年考研英语一教学沉淀，从描述图表、解读寓意到发表评论三大角度，完整呈现高分作文的内在结构。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

What is exhibited in the drawing is that, two people, who are traveling on the ship, throw some things such as water bottle into a river, leading to the rise of the rubbish in the river.

I am deep into thought after reading it.

The cartoon does reflect a thought-provoking social implication:destroying the environment when we travel is never advisable. One might wonder, what on earth accounts for this social trend? To begin with, it is the absence of moral code that leads to the occurrence of the situation depicted above. Besides, the fact also makes sense that when we play and eat on the ship, there are no situations which we can throw those remains on the ship. Lastly, if we protect environment when we travel, our life will be more beautiful, which is beneficial in the long run.

From my perspective, certain feasible measures can be adopted to handle this phenomenon. For one thing, cases concerning traveling trash can be written in textbooks so that it is available for every student. For another, individuals should protect environment. Since we all desire a colorful and continuously and advanced society, why shouldn"t we continue to preserve nature.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：hibited in the drawing is that, two people, who are traveling on the ship, throw some things such as water bottle into a river, leading to the rise of the rubbish in the river. I am deep into thought after reading it.

批改：对图画的内容描述的很完整，语言也很连贯。

原文：it is the absence of moral code that leads to the occurrence of the situation depicted above.

批改：

原文：The cartoon does reflect a thought-provoking social implication:destroying the environment when we travel is never advisable. One might wonder, what on earth accounts for this social trend? To begin with, it is the absence of moral code that leads to the occurrence of the situation depicted above. Besides, the fact also makes sense that when we play and eat on the ship, there are no situations which we can throw those remains on the ship. Lastly, if we protect environment when we travel, our life will be more beautiful, which is beneficial in the long run.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：continuously

批改：副词不能修饰后面的名词society，改成形容词continuous

批改：改成问号

原文：From my perspective, certain feasible measures can be adopted to handle this phenomenon. For one thing, cases concerning traveling trash can be written in textbooks so that it is available for every student. For another, individuals should protect environment. Since we all desire a colorful and continuously and advanced society, why shouldn"t we continue to preserve nature

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：18/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意区分词性及其用法；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，注意区分词性和主谓一致问题。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，也能够运用强调句等高级句式，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节性错误会更好。继续加油。

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