考研英语一2011年大作文失分点批改

本文整理了2011年考研英语一大作文真题原文及高分批改例文，是备考考研英语作文真题范文的实用素材。考研英语作文在考研英语中占据重要分值，历年真题范文能够帮助考生快速把握命题规律与评分要点，下面让我们一同走进这篇批改范文。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

The picture graphically portrays a moving scenario where a couple, on the boat, are seeing the sight and littering rubbish to the lake, which is almost filled with rubbish, such as bottles, cans, fish bones and others. And below the drawing, there is a topic which says: the"rest"of the journey.

Take some tourist attractions for instance. With the rapid development of finance, more and more tourist attractions welcome a huge amount of people to visit every day. The Great Wall, which is one of the most famous ancient heritages, has been destroyed by writing words or painting nowadays. It is the same as the behavior in the picture, which is not respectful to the places of interest.

Here are some actions that might be taken immediately. It is suggested that tourists should not throw rubbish freely. And please do not leave anything but praise and appreciation. Only in this way can we make the environment better.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The picture graphically portrays a moving scenario where a couple, on the boat, are seeing the sight and littering rubbish to the lake, which is almost filled with rubbish, such as bottles, cans, fish bones and others. And below the drawing, there is a topic which says: the"rest"of the journey.

批改：对漫画内容描述的很全面，语言连贯。

原文：Take some tourist attractions for instance. With the rapid development of finance, more and more tourist attractions welcome a huge amount of people to visit every day. The Great Wall, which is one of the most famous ancient heritages, has been destroyed by writing words or painting nowadays. It is the same as the behavior in the picture, which is not respectful to the places of interest.

批改：能够进行举例论证，语言连贯

原文：Here are some actions that might be taken immediately. It is suggested that tourists should not throw rubbish freely. And please do not leave anything but praise and appreciation. Only in this way can we make the environment better.

批改：能够提出自己的建议，起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：18/20

内容切题，准确全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，无拼写错误；句式方面和语法方面，句子结构完整连贯；逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。

可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬，继续加油。

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