考研英语二2011年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语二写作技巧每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2011年考研英语二批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the proportion of some brands in the domestic market in 2008 and 2009. In 2008, the percentage of Domestic Brands was approximately 25%, but by 2009, the figure had substantially risen to around 33%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese Brand experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American Brand remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using Domestic Brand and have become the primary consumer groups. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Domestic Brand is a sign of social development and will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the percentage of Japanese Brand will likely continue to decrease and the American Brand will remain relatively stable.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：Domestic Brands

批改：首字母小写

原文：Brand

批改：brands

原文：Brand

批改：brands

原文：Domestic Brand

批改：domestic brands​​ ​​

原文： groups

批改：group

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts the proportion of some brands in the domestic market in 2008 and 2009. In 2008, the percentage of Domestic Brands was approximately 25%, but by 2009, the figure had substantially risen to around 33%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese Brand experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American Brand remained stable and steady.

批改：对图表的描述较为准确

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using Domestic Brand and have become the primary consumer groups. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：论据充分，词汇和句法丰富

原文：Domestic Brand

批改：domestic brands​​ ​​

原文：Brand

批改：brands​​ ​​

原文：rand

批改：brands​​ ​​

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Domestic Brand is a sign of social development and will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the percentage of Japanese Brand will likely continue to decrease and the American Brand will remain relatively stable.

批改：good

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/15分。

1.作文内容包含全面，主题明确，层次分明，注意大小写和单复数错误；

2.运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，伴随状语，介词短语，非谓语结构和宾语从句句型很棒；

3.采用恰当的衔接手法，内容较为连贯；

4.要多内化老师讲的高分词汇和模板句型，形成自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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