启航教育在考研英语写作教学中反复强调:词汇与句式的高级化是考研英语作文高分的关键。本文整理的2015年考研英语二批改范例,几乎每一段都包含高分替换词与衔接词,是考研英语二作文范文写作锦囊中的代表性范文。
一、2015年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2015年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)
二、2015年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of different oosts during the Spring Festival for residents in a certain city. New Year"s gift takes the lead at 40%, followed b transportation, gatherings and dining and other expenses at 20%each.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be. summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society. people are no longer content. with more material satisfaction. they also pursue spirital enjoyment. This explains why an increasing number of people choos green transportation rather than traditional fuel-based. optoons. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is alwayspresent." Nowadays, people are compelled to confront immense life"s pressure, and as aresult, having dinner and parties and traveling have emerged as their significant.Choices during the Spring Festival. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart. is unsurprising
what about future trends I am confident that the choce above statistical figures acurately and truthfully reflect the. Choice of people, serving as a midrocosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stabde in the folluing decades.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:t oosts
批改:拼写错误:oosts 应为 costs(花费)
原文:New Year"s gift takes
批改:主谓不一致:主语 gift 是单数,但根据语境,礼物支出应是一个类别,通常用复数表示泛指,即 New Year"s gifts,谓语动词相应改为 take。
原文:b transportation, gatherings and
批改:followed b 应为 followed by。 gatherings and dining 意思重叠,通常合并为 dining gatherings(聚餐)即可。 and other expenses 前面的 and 导致列表混乱。原句意为“交通、聚会、餐饮和其他开支”,但“其他开支”本身就是一个类别。 20%each 应分开写作 20% each。
原文:pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of different oosts during the Spring Festival for residents in a certain city. New Year"s gift takes the lead at 40%, followed b transportation, gatherings and dining and other expenses at 20%each.
批改:本段成功抓住了图表的核心信息,结构也很好。主要问题在于拼写、主谓一致和列表的逻辑排列。通过修正这些细节,你的图表描述会显得更加专业和准确。
原文: spirital
批改:拼写错误:spirital 应为 spiritual(精神的)。
原文:xplains why an
批改:choos 应为 choose,optoons 应为 options。 严重逻辑问题:你提出“精神享受”来解释“绿色交通”,这个因果关系非常牵强。追求精神享受和选择哪种交通方式没有必然联系。这个论点与图表数据的关联度很弱。
原文:as aresu
批改:as aresult 应为 as a result。 significant.Choices 句号多余,且首字母不应大写,应为 significant choices。
原文:e core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be. summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society. people are no longer content. with more material satisfaction. they also pursue spirital enjoyment. This explains why an increasing number of people choos green transportation rather than traditional fuel-based. optoons. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is alwayspresent." Nowadays, people are compelled to confront immense life"s pressure, and as aresult, having dinner and parties and traveling have emerged as their significant.Choices during the Spring Festival. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart. is unsurprising
批改:本段尝试从多个角度分析原因,这值得鼓励。然而,核心论点的逻辑链条非常薄弱,尤其是用“精神享受”解释“交通选择”,这严重影响了说服力
原文:oice of people, ser
批改:choce 应为 above (可能想写 above,但拼错)。 acurately 应为 accurately。 the. Choice 中间句号多余,且首字母不应大写,应为 the choice。
原文: midrocosm of
批改:拼写错误:midrocosm 应为 microcosm(缩影)。
原文:tively stabde in the folluing de
批改:拼写错误:stabde 应为 stable,folluing 应为 following
原文:t about future trends I am confident that the choce above statistical figures acurately and truthfully reflect the. Choice of people, serving as a midrocosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stabde in the folluing decades.
批改:本段的拼写错误非常密集
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:8分
总评:
同学,你的写作框架保持得很好,这是你的优势。但是,这篇作文反映出两个亟待解决的突出问题:1) 论证的逻辑严谨性;2) 基础词汇的拼写准确性。 尤其是论据与论点之间的脱节,会严重影响文章的说服力。
修改建议
确保逻辑紧密:在提出任何一个原因时,请务必审视它是否能直接解释图表中的具体数据。例如,解释交通支出,应直接联系“返乡探亲的刚性需求”;解释礼物支出,则应联系“情感表达与社会礼仪”。
夯实词汇基础:请集中复习和巩固最基础的高频词汇(如cost, choose, result, stable等)的拼写。准备一个错题本,专门记录这些拼写错误,反复记忆。
对每一位2027考研人而言,考研英语二作文范文都是冲刺阶段必须攻克的难关。启航教育陪伴一届又一届学子走向考研英语写作高分,本文精解的2015年考研英语二范文正是经典参考之一。欢迎关注启航教育,了解更多考研英语备考干货。
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