2014年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2014年考研英语二大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文话题写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the changes in unan and rual populations in China. over apeird of 20 years. In 1990, the period number of urban population was approximutely 3 millions but by 2010, this figure had substantially risen to 666 millions .In contrast, the number of rural population experienced a significant decline of about 160 millions during the same period.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarie o as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremerdous efforts to build a sound employment sustem in cities, enabling rural. residents to have opportunities to find jobs in urban areas. In addition. Chinese society is

undergring an extensive and protound transformation-In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s urban infrastructure construction in responding to these changes Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising

what about future trends? I am confident that the numh of urban population will steadily increase in the following decates. In constract, the number of rural populatio will lie continue to decrease relatively stable.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：unan and rual po

批改：拼写错误：unan 和 rual 应为 urban (城市的) 和 rural (乡村的)。

原文：peird of

批改：拼写错误：apeird 应为 a period (一段时间)。

原文：s approximutel

批改：用词与语法错误： the period number of 是错误且冗余的表达，直接使用 the urban population 即可。 approximutely 拼写错误，应为 approximately (大约)。 3 millions 和 666 millions 单位错误。在具体数字后，million 应用单数形式，即 300 million 和 666 million。

原文：e bar chart clearly depicts the changes in unan and rual populations in China. over apeird of 20 years. In 1990, the period number of urban population was approximutely 3 millions but by 2010, this figure had substantially risen to 666 millions .In contrast, the number of rural population experienced a significant decline of about 160 millions during the same period.

批改：本段成功识别了核心数据与趋势，但密集的拼写和语法错误严重影响了专业性。请务必注意高频词汇的拼写和数字单位的正确用法。

原文：summarie o as

批改：拼写错误：summarie o 应为 summarized as。

原文：merdous effort

批改：拼写错误：tremerdous 应为 tremendous (巨大的)；sustem 应为 system (系统)。

原文：. In addition. Chinese s

批改：In addition. 是句子碎片，应改为 In addition,。 undergring 应为 undergoing (经历)；protound 应为 profound (深刻的)。 Chinese society is undergoing... 是一个空泛的“万能句”，没有提供具体信息，建议删除或与后文合并。

原文：re reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarie o as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremerdous efforts to build a sound employment sustem in cities, enabling rural. residents to have opportunities to find jobs in urban areas. In addition. Chinese society is undergring an extensive and protound transformation-In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s urban infrastructure construction in responding to these changes Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising

批改：本段的论证角度（就业系统、城市基建）是正确且相关的。但大量的拼写错误、不当的标点和空泛的表达严重削弱了论证的说服力

原文：what abo

批改：大小写错误：句首单词 What 应大写。

原文：e numh of urban

批改：拼写错误：numh 应为 number；decates 应为 decades (几十年)。

原文： constract, the number of rural populatio will lie continue to decrease relatively stable.

批改：拼写与逻辑错误： constract 应为 contrast (对比)。 populatio 应为 population。 lie continue 应为 likely continue (很可能继续)。 decrease relatively stable (在相对稳定中减少) 逻辑矛盾，decrease (减少) 本身就意味着变化。应删除 relatively stable。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9分

总体修改建议

根治拼写错误：这是当前最迫切的任务。请务必在写作后留出时间专门检查拼写，特别是高频词汇（如 urban, rural, government, population, decades 等）。

追求简洁精确：牢记并使用 the urban/rural population 这类简洁表达。避免使用空洞的“万能句”，让每个句子都传递具体信息。

审阅逻辑与标点：确保句子意思在逻辑上自洽，并正确使用标点符号。

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