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一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)
二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The bar chart clearly depictes the market share of some brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008,the percentage of domestic brands was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had risen to about 32%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brands experienced a decline about 8% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s car manufacturing industy in responding to these changes. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particulary those born in the 1990s, are accustomed to buying domestic automobiles and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brands will steadily increase in the following decedes. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese and American brands will likely continue to remain relative stable.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:depictes
批改:depicts
原文:The bar chart clearly depictes the market share of some brands in the domestic car market from 2008 to 2009. In 2008,the percentage of domestic brands was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had risen to about 32%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brands experienced a decline about 8% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.
批改:能够准确地描绘出图表的信息,句子连贯完整。
原文:The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s car manufacturing industy in responding to these changes. In addition, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, particulary those born in the 1990s, are accustomed to buying domestic automobiles and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
批改:能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义,能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子,使得句与句之间衔接连贯,望继续保持。
原文:What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brands will steadily increase in the following decedes. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese and American brands will likely continue to remain relative stable.
批改:能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测,言简意赅。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:13/15
1)内容符合题目的要求,能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。
2)词汇方面,基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误;句式方面,能够运用一些复杂句式,句型结构灵活多变;语法方面,总体来看语法基础没有问题。
3)逻辑结构清晰完整,论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子,符合英语句子结构的要求。
4)修改建议:可以看出作文完成的很认真,内容充分,语言逻辑清晰,值得表扬。
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