2021年考研英语一大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2021年考研英语一大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语一写作技巧备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、2021年考研英语一大作文题目

考研英语一2021年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the picture below. In your essay, you should1)describe the picture briefly, 2)interpret the implied meaning, and 3)give your comments. Write your answer on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、2021年考研英语一大作文批改例文

What springs from this cartoon is such scene:there is a son act as Sun Wukong talking to his father that many his students said that learning perform opera is boring,and the father said it’s enough if you like.This drawing presented in the test paper stimulates the thinking.

The purpose of the drawing is to show us that utmost importance should be attached to be true to yourself. The reasons can be accounted for as follows. First and foremost, due to the rapid development of technologies and improvement of living standards，people have better conditions to do what they want; secondly，due to the turning of folks" outlook and perspectives on education，they hope their children can do what they want to do. However, this is conducive to building a diverse and interesting society，and this is beneficial for children to cultivate their own interests and develop their ability to make choices.

Altogether, be true to yourself is of the essence and to reach it requires more to be done.Personally, the more attention we devote to this phenomenon, the more beneficial it will be to our personal growth and social development.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： many his students

批改：改为 “many of his classmates”（“他的许多同学”，“students” 指代 “学生”，结合场景 “儿子与父亲对话”，“classmates” 更准确，补充 “of” 符合语法）

原文：learning perform opera

批改：改为 “learning to perform Peking opera”（“学习表演京剧”，“learn to do” 为固定搭配）

原文：What springs from this cartoon is such scene:there is a son act as Sun Wukong talking to his father that many his students said that learning perform opera is boring,and the father said it’s enough if you like.This drawing presented in the test paper stimulates the thinking.

批改：描述图片内容，符合题目要求

原文：technologies

批改：改为 “technology”（“科技” 泛指，用单数）

原文：be true to

批改：改为 “staying true to...“ 动名词做主语

原文：The purpose of the drawing is to show us that utmost importance should be attached to be true to yourself. The reasons can be accounted for as follows. First and foremost, due to the rapid development of technologies and improvement of living standards，people have better conditions to do what they want; secondly，due to the turning of folks" outlook and perspectives on education，they hope their children can do what they want to do. However, this is conducive to building a diverse and interesting society，and this is beneficial for children to cultivate their own interests and develop their ability to make choices.

批改：提出了自己的观点，使用了表示逻辑关系的连接词，条理较为清晰

原文：Altogether, be true to yourself is of the essence and to reach it requires more to be done.Personally, the more attention we devote to this phenomenon, the more beneficial it will be to our personal growth and social development.

批改：总结全文，升华主题

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16

原文准确把握漫画核心寓意（坚守自我、坚持个人兴趣的重要性），搭建了议论文标准框架，核心意图明确，具备基础写作逻辑。但存在以下关键问题：语法与拼写错误密集（如 “learning perform opera”“many his students” 等）。写完再整体检查一遍，希望继续努力，加油！

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