2013年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2013年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二大作文教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2013年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2013年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2013年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The line chart clearly depicts the changes in part-time job situations among college students at a certain university. In the freshman year, the percentage of students taking part-time jobs was 67.77%, but by the junior year, this rate had gradually risen to 71.93%. In contrast, the proportion of students taking part-time jobs experienced a significant increase from the junior year to the senior year.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summerized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound cooperation between universities and companies. In addition, as the saying goes. "On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense ecouomic pressure, and as a result, grubbing part-time jobs has energed as their significant choice for seeking part-time jobs. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I"m confident that the proportion of university students doing part-time jobs will steadily increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：line

批改：改成bar，是柱状图，不是折线图

原文：The line chart clearly depicts the changes in part-time job situations among college students at a certain university. In the freshman year, the percentage of students taking part-time jobs was 67.77%, but by the junior year, this rate had gradually risen to 71.93%. In contrast, the proportion of students taking part-time jobs experienced a significant increase from the junior year to the senior year.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：ecouomic

批改：economic

原文：grubbing part-time jobs has energed as their significant choice for seeking part-time jobs

批改：这句话前后是一个意思

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summerized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound cooperation between universities and companies. In addition, as the saying goes. "On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, university students are compelled to confront immense ecouomic pressure, and as a result, grubbing part-time jobs has energed as their significant choice for seeking part-time jobs. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因，全面细致。

原文：What about future trends? I"m confident that the proportion of university students doing part-time jobs will steadily increase in the following decades.

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变；语法方面，总体来看语法基础没有问题。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免拼写错误以及注意区分line chart和bar chart。再接再厉。

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