2011年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

2011年考研英语二大作文是启航考研英语备考清单中的必练题型。本文带来的高分批改范例，配套启航教育老师的逐句批注与预测话题标签，适合考研英语考生在冲刺阶段精读精练，是一套完整的写作提升资料。

一、2011年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、2011年考研英语二大作文批改例文

By the time that economy rised, the demand of cars for the common in China had been increased and the car industries had received more orders from them. According to the recent survey of car industries from different countries in 2008 and 2009, we found that in 2008, China brands accounted for 25%, Japan"s accounted for 35% and America"s accounted for 10%. By Contrast in 2009, China"s had raised to 35% and Japan"s had decreased to 25%.

Obviously, we could find that the main amounts of car brands people chose was from China and Japan in these two years. It"s mainly due to their more advantages in lower prices and lower exhaust of fuels while they used to be driven for the same distance by contrast to the America"s. Thus, any class of people in China had more reasons and more selections to choose these brands. Furthermore, from the change from 2008 to 2009, it"s obvious to find that Japan"s had been overtaken by China’s. It"s partly because of the increasing tax of Japanese export products and the improving qualities of Chinese cars.

All in all, we should combine the car choosing with our financial savings and practical usings of cars to think of which and whether we should choose .

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：in

批改：China"s car

原文：n"s

批改：最好不要省略哦，写全比较好，Japan"s car brands

原文：ica"s

批改：American car brands

原文：a"s

批改：Chinese car brands

原文：pan"s

批改：Japanese car brands

原文：sed and the car industries had received more orders from them. According to the recent survey of car industries from different countries in 2008 and 2009, we found that in 2008, China brands accounted for 25%, Japan"s accounted for 35% and America"s accounted for 10%. By Contrast in 2009, China"s had raised to 35% and Japan"s had decreased to 25%.

批改：数据还是比较清楚明确的，句子结构完整，但是小错误比较多，注意修改哦

原文：ho

批改：have chosen

原文：a

批改：第一段有时间状语，可以用过去式，但是第二段进行原因分析，用现在时或者现在完成时即可

原文：ad

批改：have

原文：hese two years. It"s mainly due to their more advantages in lower prices and lower exhaust of fuels while they used to be driven for the same distance by contrast to the America"s. Thus, any class of people in China had more reasons and more selections to choose these brands. Furthermore, from the change from 2008 to 2009, it"s obvious to find that Japan"s had been overtaken by China’s. It"s partly because o

批改：内容还是比较到位的，丰富充实，反映现象的原因，并进行了解释，但是时态其实要注意的，不建议都用过去式哦

原文：e car choosin

批改：Chinglish

原文：and whether

批改：which one 即可，whether可以不要

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：8/15

语法：语法上注意表述的完整性，注意时态使用，考生最大的问题在于句子没落到地，让老师感觉考生对语法知识了解，但仅是一知半解，句子让人读的不是很舒服，想不到会这样用单词，也就是单词和句型不太常见，虽然语法没啥大问题，但是不地道，考生可以多看看范文和一些原汁原味的英文文章。

逻辑：整体逻辑可以的。

词汇：单词整体还行，注意一些词汇使用的适当性哦。

内容：内容比较符合题意，结构合理。

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