考研英语一2024年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2024年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一写作技巧教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2024年大作文题目

考研英语一2024年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the picture and the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture and the chart briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2024年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a boy, standing in the park and saying that the newly built park near his house is wonderful. Simultaneously, in theright-hand chart, the number of parks in a cevtain city was 406 in 2020. But by 2022, the figure had substantially risen to 670.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several days, but two of them are particularly significant. To start with, as we all know, the outbreak of COVID-19 has impacted every aspect of our lives, significantly altering people"s behaviors and choices. Consequently, an increasing number of individuals have started paying more attention to health and preferring working out in parks. In addition, as the

conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendors efforts to build more city parks, enabling residents to have ample

opportunities for fitness. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the cartoon and chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the number of exercisers and parks is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：cevtain

批改：certain

原文：In the left-hand cartoon, there is a boy, standing in the park and saying that the newly built park near his house is wonderful. Simultaneously, in theright-hand chart, the number of parks in a cevtain city was 406 in 2020. But by 2022, the figure had substantially risen to 670.

批改：对漫画内容描述的很全面，语言连贯。

原文：days

批改：ways

原文：tremendors

批改：tremendous

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several days, but two of them are particularly significant. To start with, as we all know, the outbreak of COVID-19 has impacted every aspect of our lives, significantly altering people"s behaviors and choices. Consequently, an increasing number of individuals have started paying more attention to health and preferring working out in parks. In addition, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendors efforts to build more city parks, enabling residents to have ample opportunities for fitness. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the cartoon and chart is unsurprising.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the number of exercisers and parks is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades.

批改：能对未来趋势进行预测与分析，与作文主题相符。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：17/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，注意避免拼写错误；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，语法基础很好。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的拼写错误会更好。继续加油。

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