考研英语一2024年大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的启航考研英语高分范文。本文呈现的2024年考研英语一大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、考研英语一2024年大作文题目

考研英语一2024年大作文Directions:Write an essay based on the picture and the chart below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture and the chart briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2024年大作文批改例文

The bar chart on the right,whose title marks the number of parks in recent three years,witnessed a remarkable ascent from 406 to 670. the cartoon on the left vividly depicts a harmonious scene of people taking daily exercise in citizen exercising zone,meanwhile, a child are astonished at the changes brought by the newly-built parks. It is a morning call that equal emphasis should be laid to both economy and conservation of ecology and mental health.

This phenomenon manifests that government are determined to improve citizens infrastructure and pay due attention to environment. First and foremost, park located in the city creates an isolated environment which forms a artificial barrier to the negative environmental repercussion caused by modernization. It actively responds to people’s demand of breathing fresh air without traveling to remote suburbs. What’s more, it creates an escape from heavy burden and anxiety of daily life,which fulfills spiritual needs through entirely absorbing in natural environment. Therefore,it is hardly necessary for me to cite the benefit of park since the spiritual power is one that should never lose its luster. Last but not least, it is also conducive to prompt pursuit of physical well being.

In nutshell, its significant benefits can’t be ignored for meeting the demands of people as Environment and well being of mentality and physics are becoming the topic of society. It is our responsibility to protect our earth and ourselves to create a better future for next generation.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：are

批改：主谓一致，is

原文：The bar chart on the right,whose title marks the number of parks in recent three years,witnessed a remarkable ascent from 406 to 670. the cartoon on the left vividly depicts a harmonious scene of people taking daily exercise in citizen exercising zone,meanwhile, a child are astonished at the changes brought by the newly-built parks. It is a morning call that equal emphasis should be laid to both economy and conservation of ecology and mental health.

批改：对漫画内容描述的很全面，语言连贯。

原文：are

批改：is

原文：pay

批改：pays

原文：This phenomenon manifests that government are determined to improve citizens infrastructure and pay due attention to environment. First and foremost, park located in the city creates an isolated environment which forms a artificial barrier to the negative environmental repercussion caused by modernization. It actively responds to people’s demand of breathing fresh air without traveling to remote suburbs. What’s more, it creates an escape from heavy burden and anxiety of daily life,which fulfills spiritual needs through entirely absorbing in natural environment. Therefore,it is hardly necessary for me to cite the benefit of park since the spiritual power is one that should never lose its luster. Last but not least, it is also conducive to prompt pursuit of physical well being.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：In nutshell, its significant benefits can’t be ignored for meeting the demands of people as Environment and well being of mentality and physics are becoming the topic of society. It is our responsibility to protect our earth and ourselves to create a better future for next generation.

批改：起到了呼吁和号召的作用，紧扣主题，语言连贯完整。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：17/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，无拼写错误；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，注意主谓一致问题。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬。如果能够再注意避免以上的一些小的细节问题会更好。继续加油。

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