思想品质、教育文化是考研英语大作文的高频命题方向,本文呈现的2023年考研英语一批改范例正是聚焦这一主旨。启航教育老师透过文章结构、衔接表达和结尾升华三方面,逐段展示了一篇考研英语写作冲刺高分范文的诞生过程。
一、考研英语一2023年大作文题目
考研英语一2023年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay based on the picture below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)
二、考研英语一2023年大作文批改例文
The drawing depicts a dragon boat race for which the whole town tumns out. Among many spectators flocking to the venue, an eldly woman holds her husband"s hand and cheerfully says, "It is so great that our dragon boat race is livening up!” This illustration calls attention to the inheritance of cultural traditions.
The significance of traditional culture cannot be over-stated. Through history, the Chinese nation has utilized them to bring everyone together and created a sense of belonging and unity. Nowadays, cultural traditions matter more than ever as foreign cultures have been pouring in and diluting the nation ones. The younger generations" obsession with Halloween and Christmas carnivals, coupled with their disregard, if not contempt, for their own traditions, threatens to marginalize the Chinese cultural traditions.
In brief, the protection and promotion of cultural traditions is the catalyst for our country"s development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively promote and carry forward traditional culture. That is why we have the chance to see the revitalization of a cultural tradition in this town, which represents in microcosm what is occuming across the whole country.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:tumns
批改:turns
原文:The drawing depicts a dragon boat race for which the whole town tumns out. Among many spectators flocking to the venue, an eldly woman holds her husband"s hand and cheerfully says, "It is so great that our dragon boat race is livening up!” This illustration calls attention to the inheritance of cultural traditions.
批改:能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象,并能够直接点明作文的主题。
原文:The significance of traditional culture cannot be over-stated. Through history, the Chinese nation has utilized them to bring everyone together and created a sense of belonging and unity. Nowadays, cultural traditions matter more than ever as foreign cultures have been pouring in and diluting the nation ones. The younger generations" obsession with Halloween and Christmas carnivals, coupled with their disregard, if not contempt, for their own traditions, threatens to marginalize the Chinese cultural traditions.
批改:该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述,语言衔接连贯。
原文:occuming
批改:occurring
原文:In brief, the protection and promotion of cultural traditions is the catalyst for our country"s development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively promote and carry forward traditional culture. That is why we have the chance to see the revitalization of a cultural tradition in this town, which represents in microcosm what is occuming across the whole country.
批改:能够提出自己的建议,起到了总结和再次呼应主题的作用。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:18/20
内容切题,全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面,注意避免拼写错误;句式方面,句子结构完整连贯;语法方面,语法基础很好。逻辑结构清晰完整,论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子,结构清晰。
修改建议:可以看出作文完成的非常认真,无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰,值得表扬,继续加油。
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