考研英语一2017年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2017年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一作文模板教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand picture, there is a man sitting on the chair in front of a bookshelf which is full of books, while saying that he has a great many books. On the contray, in the right-hand picture, there is a man reading a book, while making a yearly plan of reading 20 books. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that having grand aims but puny abilities is an issue that requires our high attention both in our personal lives and in society.

First and mostly, in modern society full of changes, chances, and challenges, the quality of being practical has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and its significance has become increasingly evident. What is more, being practical can nurture our souls, promote personal growth and self-fulfillment. In contrary, having grand aims but punny abilities not only hinder the younger generation"s success, but also acts as an Achilles’ heel that can turn a final step towards heaven into a stepping stone towards hell.

In brief, being pratical is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Only by being practical so can we develop individual potential.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：In the left-hand picture, there is a man sitting on the chair in front of a bookshelf which is full of books, while saying that he has a great many books. On the contray, in the right-hand picture, there is a man reading a book, while making a yearly plan of reading 20 books. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that having grand aims but puny abilities is an issue that requires our high attention both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：能够完整全面的描述出图画中的现象，并能够直接点明作文的主题。

原文：hinder

批改：单三hinders

原文：First and mostly, in modern society full of changes, chances, and challenges, the quality of being practical has become a key factor that distinguishes exceptional individuals from ordinary people, and its significance has become increasingly evident. What is more, being practical can nurture our souls, promote personal growth and self-fulfillment. In contrary, having grand aims but punny abilities not only hinder the younger generation"s success, but also acts as an Achilles’ heel that can turn a final step towards heaven into a stepping stone towards hell.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：so

批改：多余删去

原文：In brief, being pratical is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Only by being practical so can we develop individual potential.

批改：起到了呼吁和号召的作用，紧扣主题，语言连贯完整。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：18/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，无拼写错误；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，注意主谓一致问题。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬，继续加油。

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