2021年考研英语一大作文失分点批改

本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2021年考研英语一大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文万能句型写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、2021年考研英语一大作文题目

考研英语一2021年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the picture below. In your essay, you should1)describe the picture briefly, 2)interpret the implied meaning, and 3)give your comments. Write your answer on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、2021年考研英语一大作文批改例文

The above drawing, clearly presents a conversation between a father and his son. The boy standing on the left, wearing opera costume and holding a long stick behind says that: “Daddy, there are a sea of classmates think learning Opera is not interesting."The man standing on the right answers:Don"t you like it? That"s enough if you like."

Apparently, we are supposed to place more attention on this issue demonstrated in the photo rather than its superficial appearance. Several possible factors, from my point of view, can be responsible for this.In the first place, it is directly associated with changing youngsters" attitude. Indeed , compared with the past, an increasing number of individuals prefer to focus on their own interests and hobbies. What"s more, this tide, to some degree, may stem from the positive publicity and correct guidance from media, which will fuel the progress of personal fullfillment. And it is undeniable that these measures have encouraged people to give less attention on others" remarks and lead a happier and more conifident life.

In my opinion, this established trend is an inevitable result of social progress.Thus, it can be well predicted that this trend will keep going in the foreseeable future, and it will exert great influence on our life.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：think

批改：改为thinking 现在分词

原文：The above drawing, clearly presents a conversation between a father and his son. The boy standing on the left, wearing opera costume and holding a long stick behind says that: “Daddy, there are a sea of classmates think learning Opera is not interesting."The man standing on the right answers:Don"t you like it? That"s enough if you like."

批改：准确描述了漫画内容，但是应该把主题也写明

原文： on

批改：to

原文：conifident

批改：confident

原文：Apparently, we are supposed to place more attention on this issue demonstrated in the photo rather than its superficial appearance. Several possible factors, from my point of view, can be responsible for this.In the first place, it is directly associated with changing youngsters" attitude. Indeed , compared with the past, an increasing number of individuals prefer to focus on their own interests and hobbies. What"s more, this tide, to some degree, may stem from the positive publicity and correct guidance from media, which will fuel the progress of personal fullfillment. And it is undeniable that these measures have encouraged people to give less attention on others" remarks and lead a happier and more conifident life.

批改：词汇和句型不错，但是和主题寓意脱节。不要泛谈社会趋势，要紧紧围绕坚持自我来写

原文：In my opinion, this established trend is an inevitable result of social progress.Thus, it can be well predicted that this trend will keep going in the foreseeable future, and it will exert great influence on our life.

批改：结尾比较宏观，可以更具体地总结坚持自我对个人或社会的积极意义。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12/20分。

1. 题目要求：作文内容包含全面，层次分明，但主题不明显，第一段描述内容后就要引出坚持自我的主题，第二段论述坚持自我的意义，最后总结升华，三段之间明显脱节，不用大谈社会趋势，个人兴趣；

2. 语言表达：运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，定语从句，主语从句，非谓语结构和宾语从句变化使用，体现了英语水平；

3. 行文逻辑：采用恰当的衔接手法，内容较为连贯，老师评卷时会非常喜欢；

4. 改进建议：首先心中要有切合主题的整体框架，然后分段分点论述，自己写作和引用模板相结合，形成自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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