思想品质、教育文化是考研英语大作文的高频命题方向,本文呈现的2015年考研英语二批改范例正是聚焦这一主旨。启航教育老师透过文章结构、衔接表达和结尾升华三方面,逐段展示了一篇考研英语写作冲刺高分范文的诞生过程。
一、2015年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2015年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)
二、2015年考研英语二大作文批改例文
必须使用黑色字迹书写:在答题卡区域内作答,超出黑色矩形边框限定区域的答案无效
As the pie chart clearly shows the proportion about the cost among citizens in a certain city during the Spring Festival. The presents take the lead at 40%, followed by party at 20%. Traffic and other factors are considerated at 20%, 20%, respectively.
The core reason for this phenomenon can be summerized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, especially those born in l000s, are accustomed to giving away presents with each other to spread their wishes. Sure enough, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of reform, our governments have made tremedous efforts to enable our citizens to purchase presents that were deemed luxuries previously. That"s why an increasing number of people are fond of gifts.
What about future trends? I"m confident that the statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect thechanges, serving as the microlosm of era, and will last for decades.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:As
批改:去掉,as引导的是从句
原文:considerated
批改:considered
原文:As the pie chart clearly shows the proportion about the cost among citizens in a certain city during the Spring Festival. The presents take the lead at 40%, followed by party at 20%. Traffic and other factors are considerated at 20%, 20%, respectively.
批改:在描述图表信息时要注意语言的准确性。
原文:reason
批改:复数
原文:summerized
批改:summarized
原文:l000s
批改:2000s
原文:tremedous
批改:tremendous
原文:The core reason for this phenomenon can be summerized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, the younger generation, especially those born in l000s, are accustomed to giving away presents with each other to spread their wishes. Sure enough, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of reform, our governments have made tremedous efforts to enable our citizens to purchase presents that were deemed luxuries previously. That"s why an increasing number of people are fond of gifts.
批改:能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因,全面细致。
原文:What about future trends? I"m confident that the statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect thechanges, serving as the microlosm of era, and will last for decades.
批改:分析并预测了未来的趋势,言简意赅。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:10/15
1)内容符合题目的要求,能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。
2)词汇方面,基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误,名词单复数要使用正确;句式方面,能够运用一些复杂句式,句型结构灵活多变;语法方面,注意as引导从句的正确使用。
3)逻辑结构清晰完整,论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子,符合英语句子结构的要求。
4)修改建议:可以看出作文完成的很认真,内容充分,语言逻辑清晰,值得表扬。一定要细心一些,注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。
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