2015年考研英语二大作文怎么写？附例文批改

正在备考考研英语的你，是否还在为2015年考研英语二大作文的写法犯愁？本文精选一篇高分组同学的批改例文，系统梳理考研英语作文话题的常考话题与写作框架。透过启航教育老师的逐段点评，你能直观感受高分作文的得分诀窍。

一、2015年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2015年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2015年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The pie chart records the proportion of expenditure about residents in China city during the Spring Festival vacation.

As is clearly reflected by the chart, it is composed of several different portions, including the happy new year gifts,traffic ,party to eat and others.Among these, happy new year gain the percentage of 40, which already outweighs that of all the others.Besides,the traffic,party to eat and others account for the percentage of 20 respectively.

In the first place, economic advancement has to some extent contributed to give happy new year gifts mutually.Unlike their previous generations, Chinese residents in modern times who don"t have to concern about the basic living needs, enjoy better living standards and can therefore celebrate Chinese new year by sending gifts.Secondly, the huge expenditure on buying gifts can be also explains by cultural belief valued by Chinese society.

In view of the arguments above, we can conclude that the current phenomenon is of no surprise.And therefore,it can be predicted that buying gifts will still take up a large share in our expenditure during the Spring Festival.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：expenditure about

批改："expenditure about residents" → 介词使用错误，表示“某人的支出”应为 expenditure of residents。

原文：in China city

批改："China city" → 应为 Chinese cities

原文： pie chart records the proportion of expenditure about residents in China city during the Spring Festival vacation.

批改：首句开篇点题很好

原文：happy new year g

批改："happy new year gain" → 拼写和用词错误，应为 New Year gifts gain。但“gain a percentage”搭配不当，直接说 New Year gifts account for 40% 即可。

原文：clearly reflected by the chart, it is composed of several different portions, including the happy new year gifts,traffic ,party to eat and others.Among these, happy new year gain the percentage of 40, which already outweighs that of all the others.Besides,the traffic,party to eat and others account for the percentage of 20 respectively.

批改："the traffic,party to eat and others account for the percentage of 20 respectively" → 数据描述错误。“respectively”表示三者各占20%，但图表中通常并非如此。根据你的描述，更可能的是“交通、聚餐和其它类别各占20%”。 修改建议: As is shown in the chart, the expenditure is divided into several categories: New Year gifts, transportation, dining and social gatherings, and others. Among these, New Year gifts account for the largest share at 40%. The remaining categories—transportation, dining, and others—each represent 20% of the total expenditure.

原文：ontributed to

批改："contribute to" 后面应接名词或动名词，改为 contributed to the tradition of giving New Year gifts。

原文：don"t have to concern a

批改："concern" 用法错误，应为 don"t have to worry about 或 are no longer concerned with。

原文：can be also explains

批改：语态和动词形式错误，被动语态后应用过去分词，改为 can also be explained by。

原文：first place, economic advancement has to some extent contributed to give happy new year gifts mutually.Unlike their previous generations, Chinese residents in modern times who don"t have to concern about the basic living needs, enjoy better living standards and can therefore celebrate Chinese new year by sending gifts.Secondly, the huge expenditure on buying gifts can be also explains by cultural belief valued by Chinese society.

批改：分析段落的结构很好（Firstly, Secondly），论点也正确（经济原因和文化原因）。但部分句子结构冗长，且存在关键的语法和用词错误

原文：w of the arguments above, we can conclude that the current phenomenon is of no surprise.And therefore,it can be predicted that buying gifts will still take up a large share in our expenditure during the Spring Festival.

批改：结尾段很好地总结了上文并做出了合理预测

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分

同学，你的这篇作文展现出很好的宏观构思能力！“描述-分析-预测”的结构运用得非常扎实，尤其是原因分析部分，能从经济和文化两个层面展开，思路非常正确。

当前，阻碍你分数进一步提升的关键在于 “语言表达的精准度”。你似乎已经积累了一些不错的词汇和句型，但在实际运用时，会出现一些搭配错误和语法漏洞。

我给你的核心建议是：

建立“语块”意识：不要孤立地记忆单词。比如，记住 account for 40%， economic development has enabled..., can be explained by cultural traditions 这整个意群。这能极大减少搭配错误。

专注于“准确性”：在下一阶段的练习中，请把“零语法错误”作为首要目标。写完每个句子后，停下来检查一下：主谓一致吗？时态语态对吗？固定搭配用对了吗？

精细化图表词汇：有意识地积累图表作文的专用词汇，例如用 illustrates the distribution 替代 records the proportion。

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