作为考研英语备考的核心模块,2015年考研英语二大作文承载了大量学生的提分期待。本文带来的这篇批改例文,紧扣考研英语二作文范文常见话题,由启航教育资深英语教研团队逐句批改,详细标注语法、词汇与逻辑三大失分点,是考研英语写作提分的优质资料。
一、2015年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2015年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)
二、2015年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of cost in a certain city during Spring Festival. Gift of new year takes the lead at 40%. Additionally, factors such as transportation, meals and parties, and other things are also considerated, accounting for 20% respectively.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development. the younger generation, particularly those born in 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to exchanging gift to express celebration. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, individuals are compelled to confront immense pressure, and as a result, traveling has emerged as their significant choice during the Spring Festival. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of individuals, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:considerated
批改:considered
原文:The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of cost in a certain city during Spring Festival. Gift of new year takes the lead at 40%. Additionally, factors such as transportation, meals and parties, and other things are also considerated, accounting for 20% respectively.
批改:能够准确地描绘出图表的信息,句子连贯完整。
批改:逗号
原文:The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development. the younger generation, particularly those born in 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to exchanging gift to express celebration. In addition, as the saying goes, "On life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, individuals are compelled to confront immense pressure, and as a result, traveling has emerged as their significant choice during the Spring Festival. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
批改:能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义,能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子,使得句与句之间衔接连贯,望继续保持。
原文:What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of individuals, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.
批改:能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测,言简意赅。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:13/15
1)内容符合题目的要求,能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。
2)词汇方面,基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误;句式方面,能够运用一些复杂句式,句型结构灵活多变,但是要注意正确使用标点断句;语法方面,总体来看语法基础没有问题。
3)逻辑结构清晰完整,论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子,符合英语句子结构的要求。
4)修改建议:可以看出作文完成的很认真,内容充分,语言逻辑清晰,值得表扬。一定要细心一些,注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。
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