2021年考研英语一大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语作文批改话题连续多年成为考研英语一大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2021年考研英语一批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语一考生直接借鉴。

一、2021年考研英语一大作文题目

考研英语一2021年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the picture below. In your essay, you should1)describe the picture briefly, 2)interpret the implied meaning, and 3)give your comments. Write your answer on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、2021年考研英语一大作文批改例文

As shown in the picture, there is a boy, wearing the costume and saying to his father, "Dad, many of my classmates think that learning opera is boring.”, while his father encourages the child not to care about these opinions and to stick to his passion. Evidently, the cartoomist intends to convey to readers that it is sticking to oneself that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, sticking to ourselves can nurture our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfullment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-corsuming. On the other hand, following the crowd, is like a heavy chain that hinders children"s progress, depriving them of the ability to think independently and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

In brief, sticking to oneself is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we fulfill our aspirations.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：cartoomist

批改：cartoonist

原文： self-fulfullment

批改：self-fulfillment

原文：self-corsuming

批改：self-consuming

原文：,

批改：去掉

原文：sticking to oneself

批改：可以改为sticking to one’s own passions or interests，以细化 “坚持自我”这个具体方向

原文：his phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, sticking to ourselves can nurture our souls, and promote personal growth and self-fulfullment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-corsuming. On the other hand, following the crowd, is like a heavy chain that hinders children"s progress, depriving them of the ability to think independently and preventing them from shining brightly in future society

批改：从 “坚持自我滋养心灵、促进个人成长” 和 “随波逐流阻碍进步” 两个角度分析现象

原文：In brief, sticking to oneself is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we fulfill our aspirations.

批改：总结观点，并呼吁支持

原文：As shown in the picture, there is a boy, wearing the costume and saying to his father, "Dad, many of my classmates think that learning opera is boring.”, while his father encourages the child not to care about these opinions and to stick to his passion. Evidently, the cartoomist intends to convey to readers that it is sticking to oneself that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：准确描述了漫画场景，并通过强调句提炼出 “坚持自我具有重要积极意义” 的核心寓意

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/20

1.题目要求：字数符合题目要求。文章需要分析图画并标明观点，符合题目要求。

2.语言表达：语言表达清晰，但存在一些拼写错误，考生需注意。

3.内容层面：包含题目要求的内容。

4.修改意见：文章整体较完整，结构较为清晰，按照描述漫画、阐述哲理和提出呼吁的顺序进行写作。然而存在一些拼写错误，考生需多加注意。建议考生在写作时认真检查。另外范文只是参考，可以尝试用自己的语言写作，将对题目的理解用自己的话语表达出来。

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语作文批改写作提分的可靠方案。