考研英语一2017年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2017年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一大作文教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand cartoon, there is a man sitting on the chair and boasting that he has a lot of books. On the contrary,in the right-hand cartoon, the other young man making a plan of reading 20 books. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that being practical is the brush that paints a bright future , while daydreaming is the shackle that hinders their progress.

This phenomenon is thought- provoking in several ways but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand,being practical can promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, daydreaming is like a heavy chain that hinders children’s, leaving them with a negative outlook on life and preventing them from shining brightly in future society, but also significantly affecting its international image.

In brief, being practical is the catalyst for societal, and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit, Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice; additionally, we most be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of daydreaming to ensure our growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：the other young man making

批改：缺少谓语动词，补充 “is”

原文：children’s

批改：后缺少名词，添加 “progress”

原文：,

批改：删除

原文：most be

批改：改为 “must be”（拼写错误）

原文：In the left-hand cartoon, there is a man sitting on the chair and boasting that he has a lot of books. On the contrary,in the right-hand cartoon, the other young man making a plan of reading 20 books. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that being practical is the brush that paints a bright future , while daydreaming is the shackle that hinders their progress.

批改：描述图片内容，符合题目要求

原文：This phenomenon is thought- provoking in several ways but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand,being practical can promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, daydreaming is like a heavy chain that hinders children’s, leaving them with a negative outlook on life and preventing them from shining brightly in future society, but also significantly affecting its international image.

批改：提出了自己的观点，使用了表示逻辑关系的连接词，条理较为清晰

原文：In brief, being practical is the catalyst for societal, and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit, Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice; additionally, we most be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of daydreaming to ensure our growth stays on course.

批改：结尾升华主题，符合结尾段的内容和结构

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16

原文紧扣 “空谈 vs 务实” 的图画核心，框架完整，符合考研英语大作文的基本要求，且运用了比喻修辞（brush/shackle），具备较好的写作基础。但存在一些问题：语法、表达错误：缺少谓语动词、固定搭配不当、拼写错误等，写完可以整体再检查一遍，避免出现粗心的错误，希望继续努力，加油！

想要体验启航教育的考研英语批改服务，只需三步：在线咨询提交作文→资深讲师逐句点评→获取完整批改报告。所有报名2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班的同学，均可享受考研英语一大作文高分批改服务，名额有限，先到先得。