考研英语二2011年大作文实例分析与批改

2011年考研英语二大作文围绕哪一类话题命题？本文精选的范文聚焦考研英语二作文真题话题方向，结合启航教育多年考研英语二教学沉淀，从描述图表、解读寓意到发表评论三大角度，完整呈现高分作文的内在结构。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depict various Market shares share of partly brands of car markets in China From 2008 to 2009.In 2008 the percentage of China brands was approximately 25.5%,but by 2009 this rate has Substantially risen to around 31%.In contrast the proportion of Japan brands experienced a significant slow of about 9% during the same period.Simultaneously the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, The younger generation particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary group. In addition chinese society was undergoing and extensive and profound transformation. In my view the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry of car than foreign in responding to these changes. Considering these factors the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brands will steadily increase in the following decades.In contrast the proportion of Japan brands and American brands will likely continue to decrease and remain relatively stable, respectively.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：depict

批改：单三

原文：share

批改：多余删去

原文：partly

批改：part形容词

原文：From

批改：小写

原文：China

批改：Chinese

原文：has

批改：had

原文：Japan

批改：Japanese

原文：slow

批改：decline

原文：The bar chart clearly depict various Market shares share of partly brands of car markets in China From 2008 to 2009.In 2008 the percentage of China brands was approximately 25.5%,but by 2009 this rate has Substantially risen to around 31%.In contrast the proportion of Japan brands experienced a significant slow of about 9% during the same period.Simultaneously the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.

批改：能够清晰的描绘图表中展现的内容，内容完整，注意避免小的语言错误。

批改：加逗号

原文：The

批改：逗号后单词小写

批改：加逗号

批改：加逗号断句

原文：chinese

批改：国家名是专有名词首字母大写

原文：and

批改：an

原文：than foreign

批改：去掉

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development, The younger generation particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic cars and have become the primary group. In addition chinese society was undergoing and extensive and profound transformation. In my view the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry of car than foreign in responding to these changes. Considering these factors the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词对图表中的现象进行分析论述，注意避免小的语言错误。

批改：加逗号断句

原文：Japan

批改：Japanese

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brands will steadily increase in the following decades.In contrast the proportion of Japan brands and American brands will likely continue to decrease and remain relatively stable, respectively.

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，专有名词首字母要大写，要注意区分词性；句式和语法方面，注意主谓一致以及正确使用标点符号断句。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的比较认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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