考研英语二2011年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2011年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二作文范文话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts the market share of some brands in China from 2008 to 2009.In 2008,the percentage of Chinese brand was approximately 25%,but by 2009,this rate had risen to around 30%.In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a decline of about 10% during the same period.Simultaneously,the percentage of Americian brand remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows.To start with,as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes,our government has made tremendous efforts to promote the quality of domestic cars and reduce thire prices,enabling Chinese people to choose them when they want to buy new car.In addition,in the wake of the high speed of domestic automotive industry,people’s attudides toward domestic car have undergone significant changes.This explains why an increasing number of people choose domestic car rather than Japanese and Americian brand’s.Considering these factors,the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsuperising.

What about future trends?I am confident that the proportion of Chinese brand will steadily increase in the following decades.In contrast, the proportion of Japanese and Americian brand will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：语法正确

原文：brand

批改：可数名词的单数形式不能单独存在, 此处改为复数形式 brands

原文：brand

批改：改为复数 brands

原文：brand

批改：改为 brands

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

原文：thire

批改：their

原文：car

批改：可数名词的单数形式不能单独存在, 此处改为复数形式 cars

原文：the high speed

批改：此处为名词短语，改为 the high-speed advancement

原文：attudides

批改：attitudes

原文： car

批改：改为 cars

原文：car

批改：改为 cars

原文：brand’s

批改：改为 cars

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

原文： brand

批改：改为 brands

原文：brand

批改：改为 brands

批改：结尾段表达很好

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2. 拼写要细心。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，试着多用自己的话来写，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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