考研英语一2017年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2017年考研英语一批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语一写作冲刺教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目

考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand picture, there is a boy lying on a chair and saying "I have so many books!” On the contrary, in the right-hand portrayal, there is another boy reading a book while saying "I"ll try to read 20 books this year." Evidently, the picture intends to convey to readers that reading books is the brush that paints a bright future, while just thinking and not reading anything is the shackle that hinders progress.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, book reading can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming. On the other hand, laziness is not only merely a chronic poison that stifles potential, but also the Achilles’ heel of many youth. It is silently erodes opportunities while wrapping the ladder of ascent into a self-destructive slide.

In brief, book reading is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice; additionally, we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of laziness to ensure our growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： It is silently erodes

批改：错误：“is”（系动词）与 “erodes”（实义动词第三人称单数）不能同时作谓语，属于谓语动词重复。​ 修正：It silently erodes opportunities...

原文：self-consuming

批改：错误：“self-consuming”（自我消耗的）多形容事物，形容人 “虚度时光” 用 “self-indulgent”（自我放纵的）更贴切，搭配 “life” 逻辑更顺。​ 修正：rather than making life self-indulgent

原文：from which we all stand to benefit.

批改：错误：“from which” 指代 “book reading”，但 “stand to benefit from sth” 为固定搭配，原句语序导致逻辑稍显模糊。​ 修正：a practice from which we all stand to benefit

原文：the picture intends to convey to readers that reading books is the brush that paints a bright future, while just thinking and not reading anything is the shackle that hinders progress.

批改：表达不错

原文：book reading can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningfu

批改：表达不错，很流畅

原文：we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of laziness to ensure our growth stays on course.

批改：结尾很不错哦，语序语法都没问题，意思也很到位

原文：In the left-hand picture, there is a boy lying on a chair and saying "I have so many books!” On the contrary, in the right-hand portrayal, there is another boy reading a book while saying "I"ll try to read 20 books this year."

批改：图片内容描绘的不错，可以看到基本功不错

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：15/20，加油哦。图片内容描绘的不错，可以看到基本功不错，对于个别语法，词组的搭配，再检查下

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