2014年考研英语二大作文失分点批改

2014年考研英语二大作文是考研英语作文模板备考清单中的必练题型。本文带来的高分批改范例，配套启航教育老师的逐句批注与预测话题标签，适合考研英语考生在冲刺阶段精读精练，是一套完整的写作提升资料。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

Changes in China"s urban and rural population in the 20 years

The volum chart vividly illustrates more and more people remove to city from county in the 20 years.Urban population had been on a rise from 300 to 666 billion in 1990 and 2010. In constrat,rural population experienced a decrease from 834 to 674 billion in the same time.

This dramatic divergence can be primarily attributed to two factors.This distribution pattern signifies a ptofound shift in the development of living standard.First and foremost with the rapid development of the national economy and the gradual increase of people"s disposable income,the people"s living standards have improved accordingly.As a result,a growing number of people have a strong demand for convenient lifestyle. In addition,the increasingly fierce competition in job market pushes them to improve their qualification.Thus,they choose urban education resources that are better than those in the countrysied to receive learning.

In conclusion,it is a positive trend to population migration to towns.From what has been discussed above,it is not difficult to reach the conclusion that move from the countryside to the city is valuable for personal growth and social development.Only in this way can we achieve our goals which make life as convenient as possile.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：volum ch

批改：拼写错误：应为 The bar chart (柱状图)。

原文： and more people r

批改：用词与语法错误： remove (移除) 用词不当，表示搬迁应用 move。 county (县) 概念不准确，应用 countryside (农村) 或 rural areas。 整句表达口语化，可改为更书面的 the migration of people from rural areas to cities。

原文：ban population had

批改：严重数据错误 & 时态错误： billion (十亿) 是错误单位，图表数据单位为 million (百万)。这是一个关键错误。 had been on a rise (过去完成时) 使用不当，描述过去某一时间段内的变化应用一般过去时 rose。

原文：n constrat,ru

批改：拼写错误：constrat 应为 contrast

原文： in China"s urban and rural population in the 20 years The volum chart vividly illustrates more and more people remove to city from county in the 20 years.Urban population had been on a rise from 300 to 666 billion in 1990 and 2010. In constrat,rural population experienced a decrease from 834 to 674 billion in the same t

批改：本段成功识别了核心趋势，但数据单位的错误是致命伤，完全扭曲了事实。此外，用词和时态的不准确也影响了开篇。

原文：s distribution patte

批改：拼写错误 & 逻辑跳跃： ptofound 应为 profound (深刻的)。 living standard 应用复数 living standards。 该句子与上下文衔接不强，略显空洞，可以考虑删除或与下文融合。

原文：ng demand fo

批改：语法错误：lifestyle 是可数名词，前面需加冠词 a。

原文：qualificatio

批改：qualification (资格/资质) 通常指具体证书或条件。想表达“提升自身（能力）”应用 their skills 或 their qualifications (用复数)。

原文：in the count

批改：拼写与用词： countrysied 拼写错误，应为 countryside。 receive learning 是中式表达，地道的说法是 to study 或 to receive an education。

原文：dramatic divergence can be primarily attributed to two factors.This distribution pattern signifies a ptofound shift in the development of living standard.First and foremost with the rapid development of the national economy and the gradual increase of people"s disposable income,the people"s living standards have improved accordingly.As a result,a growing number of people have a strong demand for convenient lifestyle. In addition,the increasingly fierce competition in job market pushes them to improve their qualification.Thus,they choose urban

批改：本段的论证角度很好，从经济驱动（生活水平）和个人发展（教育）两方面分析，思路正确。但拼写、用词和搭配错误较多，使得原本有说服力的论点打了折扣。

原文：,it is a positive trend to pop

批改：语法错误：应为 it is a positive trend that the population is migrating to towns/cities 或 population migration to cities is a positive trend。

原文：t move fro

批改：语法错误：move 是动词，不能直接作主语。应改为动名词 moving 或名词 the move。

原文：Only in this wa

批改：拼写错误 & 逻辑牵强： possile 应为 possible。 goals which make life as convenient as possible (让生活尽可能方便的目标) 作为全文总结，立意显得过于狭隘和片面，与上文讨论的经济发展、教育等宏观议题不匹配。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9分

总体修改建议

保证数据准确： 图表作文中，数据的单位和数值是生命线，必须确保万无一失。

夯实语言基础： 集中记忆一批高频拼写错误的单词（如 chart, contrast, profound, countryside, possible）。注意名词的单复数和冠词使用。

优化论证逻辑： 确保每个论点都直接、有力地解释图表现象。结论应回扣全文，进行适度升华，而非引入新的、狭隘的观点。

审阅与修改： 写完初稿后，务必留出时间通篇检查，重点纠正拼写和语法错误。

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