2021年考研英语一大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2021年考研英语一大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语一作文范文备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、2021年考研英语一大作文题目

考研英语一2021年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the picture below. In your essay, you should1)describe the picture briefly, 2)interpret the implied meaning, and 3)give your comments. Write your answer on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、2021年考研英语一大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there is a young boy, wearing the Monkey King costume and saying to his father, "Dad, many of my classmates think that learning opera is boring," while his father encourages the child to stick to his hobby. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is sticking to oneself that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, sticking to oneself can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self. consuming. On the other hand, blindly following others is like a heavy chain that hinders children"s progress, depriving them of the ability to think independently and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

In brief, sticking to oneself is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we develop individual potential, fulfill our aspirations and create a happier life.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：shown in the cartoon, there is a young boy, wearing the Monkey King costume and saying to his father, "Dad, many of my classmates think that learning opera is boring," while his father encourages the child to stick to his hobby. Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it is sticking to oneself that plays an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

批改： 你对图画的描述非常生动、准确，人物的装扮、对话和父亲的鼓励都捕捉得很到位。结尾句也清晰地点明了文章主旨。

原文：phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, sticking to oneself can ignite our creativity, and promote personal growth and self-fulfillment, thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self. consuming. On the other hand, blindly following others is like a heavy chain that hinders children"s progress, depriving them of the ability to think independently and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

批改：本段从“坚持自我”的益处和“盲目从众”的危害两方面论证，结构清晰，逻辑严密。“heavy chain”的比喻和“depriving them...”的论述非常有力。

原文：elf. consumi

批改：“self. consuming” 应为 “self-consuming”。

原文：n ignite our creativ

批改：正面影响的论证中，“ignite creativity” 和 “promote growth” 的表述稍显概括。可以思考一下“坚持自我”是如何具体带来这些好处的，例如补充一句：“It allows us to discover and develop our unique talents, building a solid foundation of self-confidence that is not easily shaken by external opinions.”

原文：rief, sticking to oneself is the catalyst for personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively support and advocate this practice. Only by doing so can we develop individual potential, fulfill our aspirations and create a happier life.

批改： 结尾段总结有力，再次点明了主题，并使用了“catalyst”这样的高级词汇。“Only by doing so...”的倒装句也用得很好，增强了文章的力度。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16分

总评：

你的文章结构稳固，立意准确，论证清晰有力，并且能使用高级词汇和复杂句式。主要的提升空间在于追求语言表达的极致地道和论证深度的进一步挖掘。

修改建议

将“sticking to oneself”替换为“staying true to oneself”这样更地道的搭配

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