作为考研英语备考的核心模块,2014年考研英语二大作文承载了大量学生的提分期待。本文带来的这篇批改例文,紧扣考研英语二作文范文常见话题,由启航教育资深英语教研团队逐句批改,详细标注语法、词汇与逻辑三大失分点,是考研英语写作提分的优质资料。
一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目
考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.
二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文
The bar chant clearly dapists the changes in urban and rural populations in china over period of 20years.In 1990, the urban populations was approximartely 300 million, but by 2010, this figure had substantially risen to 666 million. In contrast, the rural populations experienced a slow decline of about 160 million during the same period.
The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarize as follows: To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound employment system in cities,enabling rural residents to have ample opportunties to find jobs in urban area.In addition, in the wake of the
high-speeding development of society , rural residents are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue a higher quality of life. This explains why an increasing number of them choose to live in urban. Considering these factors, the depicts phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
What about future trends? I am confident that the number of unban population is a clear sign of social improvement and will Steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast
the number of rural population will likely continue to decrease.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:e bar chant clearly dap
批改:拼写错误:chant 应为 chart;dapists 应为 depicts。
原文: in china o
批改:语法与拼写错误:国家名 China 首字母必须大写。over period 前缺少冠词,应为 over a period of 20 years。
原文:populations
批改:语法错误:在指代作为整体概念的“城市人口”和“乡村人口”时,population 通常用作不可数名词或单数形式,此处应用 population。
原文:pproximartel
批改:拼写错误:approximartely 应为 approximately
原文:bar chant clearly dapists the changes in urban and rural populations in china over period of 20years.In 1990, the urban populations was approximartely 300 million, but by 2010, this figure had substantially risen to 666 million. In contrast, the rural populations experienced a slow decline of about 160 million during the same period.
批改:本段成功抓住了核心数据与趋势。但密集的拼写和语法错误影响了专业性。请务必确保高频词汇的拼写和基本语法的正确。
原文:e summarize as
批改:语法错误:情态动词 can be 后应接过去分词,即 summarized。
原文:ple opportunties t
批改:拼写与语法错误:opportunties 应为 opportunities。urban area 为可数名词,应用复数 urban areas 或前面加冠词 the urban area。
原文:ose to live in ur
批改:语法错误:urban 是形容词,后面必须接名词,如 in urban areas 或 in cities。
原文:enomenon in
批改:语法错误:depicts 是动词,此处应用过去分词 depicted 作定语。
原文:eeding development of society , rural residents are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue a higher quality of life. This explains why an increasing number of them choose to live in urban. Considering these factors, the depicts phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.
批改:本段的论证角度(就业、生活质量)非常出色且切题。但拼写和语法错误拖累了论证的有效性。您的好观点需要准确的语言来支撑。
原文:number of unban popula
批改:拼写错误 & 表达冗余:unban 应为 urban。the number of... population 是冗余表达,应直接使用 the urban population。
原文:will Steadily increas
批改:拼写错误:副词 steadily 不应大写。
原文:about future trends? I am confident that the number of unban population is a clear sign of social improvement and will Steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast the number of rural population will likely continue to decrease.
批改:本段预测合理
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:10分
总体修改建议
根治拼写错误:这是当前最迫切的任务。请务必在写作后留出时间专门检查拼写,特别是 chart, depicts, opportunities, urban, summarized 等高频词。
追求简洁与精确:牢记并使用 urban population 和 rural population 这类简洁表达,删除冗余词汇。
保持客观严谨:在分析型写作中,避免使用文学比喻和主观价值判断,让语言为清晰论证服务。
检查语法细节:注意名词的单复数、冠词的使用以及词性的正确性。
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