2014年考研英语二大作文实例分析与批改

2014年考研英语二大作文围绕哪一类话题命题？本文精选的范文聚焦考研英语二真题话题方向，结合启航教育多年考研英语二教学沉淀，从描述图表、解读寓意到发表评论三大角度，完整呈现高分作文的内在结构。

一、2014年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2014年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、2014年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The line chart clearly depilts the changes in unbon and Yural populations in China from 1990 to 290. In 1990, the number of urban population was 300 milions, but by 2010,the figure had substantially contrast, the

visen to 660 millions. In number of rual population experienced slow decline of 160 millions. during the some period. The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summaried as follows. To start with, as the condutor orctrestating the symphony of changes, our government has made trmendous efforts to build a sound econamic system，enabling rural people to have ample opportunities for earning more money. In addition, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people attitudtes towards of living have undergune significant changes, they are no longer content with mere material satistaction, they also aspire a better living. This explains why increasing number of people choose settle city rather than rural house. Considering these factors, the deplated phenoment in the chart is unsurprising.

. What about future trends? I am confident that the number of urban population will steadily increase in following deades. In contrast, the number of rural poputation will likely continue to decrease relatively stable.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：depilts the changes in unbon and Yural po

批改：depilts -> depicts (拼写错误) unbon and Yural -> urban and rural (核心术语拼写错误，严重影响理解)

原文：90 to 290. In 1990, the number of urban population was 300 milions,

批改：from 1990 to 290 -> from 1990 to 2010 (关键的年份数据错误) milions / millions -> million (作为数量单位，million 在数字后不加 s)

原文：e had substantially contrast, the visen to 660 mi

批改：the figure had substantially contrast, the visen to 660 millions. 此句结构混乱，无法理解。推测应为 the figure had substantially risen to 666 million.

原文： number of rual population

批改：In number of rual population -> the rural population (术语拼写错误 rual -> rural，且句子缺少主语)

原文：he some perio

批改：during the some period -> during the same period (拼写错误)

原文：he line chart clearly depilts the changes in unbon and Yural populations in China from 1990 to 290. In 1990, the number of urban population was 300 milions, but by 2010,the figure had substantially contrast, the visen to 660 millions. In number of rual population experienced slow decline of 160 millions. during the some period.

批改：本段正确地识别了城乡人口变化的趋势。但出现了大量极其严重的基础错误，包括核心术语拼写错误、关键年份错误、句子结构断裂等，导致本段几乎无法被理解。确保基本信息的准确和句子的完整是写作的第一步。

原文：mmaried as follows. To start with, as the condutor orctre

批改：ummaried -> summarized (拼写错误) condutor orctrestating -> conductor orchestrating (拼写错误)

原文：endous efforts to build a sound econam

批改：trmendous -> tremendous (拼写错误) econamic -> economic (拼写错误)

原文：attitudtes towards of living have undergune significant changes, they

批改：attitudtes towards of living -> attitudes toward living (拼写错误且介词使用错误) undergune -> undergone (拼写错误)

原文：atistaction, they also aspire a bet

批改：satistaction -> satisfaction (拼写错误) aspire a better living -> aspire to a better living (固定搭配 aspire to)

原文：This explains why increasing number of people choose settle city rather than rural house. Considering these factors, the deplated phenoment in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：choose settle city -> choose to settle in cities (语法错误，choose to do, settle in a place) rural house -> rural areas (用词不当) deplated phenoment -> depicted phenomenon (拼写错误)

原文： core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summaried as follows. To start with, as the condutor orctrestating the symphony of changes, our government has made trmendous efforts to build a sound econamic system，enabling rural people to have ample opportunities for earning more money. In addition, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people attitudtes towards of living have undergune significant changes, they are no longer content with mere material satistaction, they also aspire a better living. This explains why increasing number of people choose settle city rather than rural house. Considering these factors, the deplated phenoment in the chart is unsurprisin

批改：本段的分析角度（经济机会、生活追求）是相关且正确的。但和第一段一样，密集的拼写错误和语法错误完全掩盖了内容的有效性

原文：lowing deades. In contrast, the num

批改：in following deades -> in the following decades (缺少定冠词 the，deades -> decades) poputation -> population (拼写错误)

原文：ion will likely continue to decrease relatively stable.

批改：will likely continue to decrease relatively stable：此句语法错误。decrease (动词) 与 stable (形容词) 无法搭配。可改为 will likely continue to decrease。

原文：at about future trends? I am confident that the number of urban population will steadily increase in following deades. In contrast, the number of rural poputation will likely continue to decrease relatively s

批改：结尾段对未来的预测方向是正确的

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：7分

未能按要求完成试题规定的任务。第一段漏掉或错误阐述了几乎所有内容要点（对象、年份、数据），且语言错误极多，严重影响理解。第二、三段同样受到语言能力的严重制约。

总评：

同学，你好！这篇作文反映出我们在开始追求结构和文采之前，有一个更根本的环节需要投入最大的精力——语言基础的准确性与严谨性。

1. 语言方面：

当前最紧迫、最核心的任务是解决拼写问题和基本语法。文中出现了大量高频词汇（如urban, rural, population, government, economic, decade）的拼写错误，以及诸如介词缺失、动词不定式使用错误等基础语法问题。这导致文章几乎难以通读。请务必在写作后投入大量时间进行逐词检查，确保核心词汇的拼写万无一失。清晰准确是高分的第一步，也是目前唯一的一步。

2. 结构方面：

你具备了基本的结构意识，这很好。但所有好的结构和思路都必须建立在正确的语言之上。目前，内容的有效性被基础错误完全淹没。

总的修改建议：

回归基础，死磕单词：请立刻整理一个“个人高频错误词汇表”，将urban, rural, population, government, economic, decade, describe, increase, decrease等词的正确拼写反复记忆，直到形成肌肉记忆。

简化表达，追求正确

审题与检查：动笔前花1分钟确认图表的所有文字信息（标题、坐标轴、图例）。

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