考研英语一2023年大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2023年考研英语一大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语一作文范文备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、考研英语一2023年大作文题目

考研英语一2023年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay based on the picture below. In your essay, you should 1) describe the picture briefly, 2) interpret the implied meaning, and 3) give your comments. Write your answer in 160-200 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2023年大作文批改例文

This enlightening picture features a scene of dragon boat race in the conspicuous position.It is not difficult to see that an elderly couple were watching the competition and remarked “How wonderful! The dragon boat races in our village are getting more and more lively.”

Obviously,this picture offers us a golden opportunity to focus on young people’s emphasis on traditional cultural activities by depicting the lively atmosphere of the competition.Undoubtedly greater emphasis must be placed on Chinese traditional culture.It is anything but a trivial matter.One of the main reasons is that in today’s multicultural society,traditional culture is gradually being valued by young people.The driving force behind this phenomenon is that the country strongly advocates,the vigorous development of economy and culture,as well as the role of education in preserving traditional culture.As an illustration,according to a 2023 study ,by Bloomberg,63 % of young people are increase attaching importance to the significance of traditional culture in their life.

On the whole,I do believe that more and more young people will return to our Chinese traditional culture and promote our culture spirit.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：his enlightening picture features a scene of dragon boat race in the conspicuous position.It is not difficult to see that an elderly couple were watching the competition and remarked “How wonderful! The dragon boat races in our village are getting more and more lively.”

批改：对漫画内容描述的很全面，语言连贯。

原文：increase

批改：改成副词increasingly

原文：bviously,this picture offers us a golden opportunity to focus on young people’s emphasis on traditional cultural activities by depicting the lively atmosphere of the competition.Undoubtedly greater emphasis must be placed on Chinese traditional culture.It is anything but a trivial matter.One of the main reasons is that in today’s multicultural society,traditional culture is gradually being valued by young people.The driving force behind this phenomenon is that the country strongly advocates,the vigorous development of economy and culture,as well as the role of education in preserving traditional culture.As an illustration,according to a 2023 study ,by Bloomberg,63 % of young people are increase attaching importance to the significance of traditional culture in their life.

批改：该段落能够将图画背后蕴含的真实意义加以阐述，语言衔接连贯。能够运用逻辑关系词来连接句子，值得表扬。

原文：On the whole,I do believe that more and more young people will return to our Chinese traditional culture and promote our culture spirit.

批改：起到了呼吁和号召的作用，紧扣主题，语言连贯完整。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：18/20

内容切题，全面的描绘出了图画中的内容。词汇方面，无拼写错误；句式方面，句子结构完整连贯；语法方面，注意词性之间的修饰关系。逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，结构清晰。

修改建议：可以看出作文完成的非常认真，无论是内容的充分性还是语言的逻辑结构都特别的清晰，值得表扬，继续加油。

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