考研英语二2011年大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语写作模板话题连续多年成为考研英语二大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2011年考研英语二批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语二考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The chart shows share of the market about car brands in China at 2008 and 2009. It include china brand, Japanese brand and American brand.

In 2008, the market share of Japanese brands accounted for 35%, it is the highest. The second are China brands, the morket share of China brands uccounted for 25%. The lowest are American brands, the market share of American brands is only accounted for 10%.

In 2009, the market share of domestic brands vose to 30%, it ha becoming the highest. On the contrary, the market share of Jupunese brands dropped to 25%. The market share of American brands remains the lowest, at 10%

This might be because in 2009, the quality of China brands improved and they have policy support, which challenged the market share of Japanese brands in China. And the market share of American brands also very stable.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：include

批改：includes 第三人称单数形式

原文：china

批改：Chinese

原文：China

批改：Chinese

原文：China

批改：Chinese

原文：morket

批改：market

原文：uccounted

批改：accounted

原文： accounted for

批改：删除

原文：The chart shows share of the market about car brands in China at 2008 and 2009. It include china brand, Japanese brand and American brand. In 2008, the market share of Japanese brands accounted for 35%, it is the highest. The second are China brands, the morket share of China brands uccounted for 25%. The lowest are American brands, the market share of American brands is only accounted for 10%.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：In 2009, the market share of domestic brands vose to 30%, it ha becoming the highest. On the contrary, the market share of Jupunese brands dropped to 25%. The market share of American brands remains the lowest, at 10%

批改：上面已经阐述了具体数据，此处内容赘余

原文：also

批改：补充be动词 is

原文：China

批改：Chinese

原文：This might be because in 2009, the quality of China brands improved and they have policy support, which challenged the market share of Japanese brands in China. And the market share of American brands also very stable.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：7/15

词汇：考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

内容：在第二段分析原因时，我们可以有两个选择，一是只分析中国品牌占比上升的原因，二是可以加上日本品牌占比下降的原因，关于日本品牌占比下降的原因，可以写日本品牌一些不当行为导致其声誉下降，进而影响其销量等原因。

整体来看，作文建议采取三段式，第一段论述数据的内容占比过多，会导致重点不突出，结构不清晰

复习考研英语大作文，务必要重视范文精读+专业批改的双向结合。启航教育2027考研英语斌哥写作锦囊冲刺抢分班，专为冲刺阶段考生打造，从话题预测到写作模板一应俱全，是考研英语写作模板写作提分的可靠方案。