作为考研英语备考的核心模块,2016年考研英语二大作文承载了大量学生的提分期待。本文带来的这篇批改例文,紧扣考研英语二作文模板常见话题,由启航教育资深英语教研团队逐句批改,详细标注语法、词汇与逻辑三大失分点,是考研英语写作提分的优质资料。
一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目
考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.
二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文
The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of the survey of travel purpose of students, enjoy the stunning views takes the lead at 37%, followed by easing the stress at 33%. Additionally, factors such as others, have new friends and depend myself are also considered accounting for 15%,9%,and 6%,respectively.
The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this is the significant progress made by China"s tourism industry in responding to these changes.In addition,as the saying goes, "on life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time.Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the pie is unsurprising.
What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:,
批改:句号
原文:enjoy
批改:动名词做主语Enjoying
原文:have
批改:making
原文:depend myself
批改:cultivating independence
批改:加逗号断句
原文:The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of the survey of travel purpose of students, enjoy the stunning views takes the lead at 37%, followed by easing the stress at 33%. Additionally, factors such as others, have new friends and depend myself are also considered accounting for 15%,9%,and 6%,respectively.
批改:在描述图表信息时要注意语言的准确性。
原文:The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this is the significant progress made by China"s tourism industry in responding to these changes.In addition,as the saying goes, "on life"s stage, pressure is always present." Nowadays, students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure, and as a result, traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time.Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the pie is unsurprising.
批改:能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义,能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子,使得句与句之间衔接连贯,望继续保持。
原文:pie
批改:pie chart
原文:What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of students, serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era, and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades.
批改:分析并预测了未来的趋势,言简意赅。
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:10/15
1)内容符合题目的要求,能够全面的描绘出图表中的内容。
2)词汇方面,注意饼图的完整表达为pie chart;句式方面,能够运用一些复杂句式,句型结构灵活多变;语法方面,注意动名词做主语以及介词后加动词ing形式。
3)逻辑结构清晰完整,论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子,符合英语句子结构的要求。
4)修改建议:可以看出作文完成的很认真,内容充分,语言逻辑清晰,值得表扬。一定要细心一些,注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。
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