考研英语二2016年大作文失分点批改

据启航教育英语教研组统计，考研英语作文批改话题连续多年成为考研英语二大作文的高频考点。本文带来的2016年考研英语二批改例文中，考生通过对社会热点的精准分析与地道表达，获得高分，其写作思路可供2027考研英语二考生直接借鉴。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

The pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of various purpose of traveling among students at a certain university .Enjoining scenery takes the lead at 37%,follwed by reliving pressure at 33%.Additional ,factors such as making friends ,independence ability and others are also considered ,accounting for 9%,6%,and 15 %respectively .

The core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows .To start with ,In the wak of the high -speed advancement of society ,university students are no longer content with mere material satisfaction ,they also pursue spiritual enjoyment ,This explains why an increasing number of university students choose to enjoy scenery rather than staying school .In addition ,as saying goes ,”on life’s stage,pressure is always present .”Nowadays ,university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure ,and as a result ,reliving pressure by traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time .Considering these factors ,the depicted phenomenon in the table is unsurprising.

What about future trends ?I am confident that the above statistics figure accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students,serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era ,and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades .

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：urpose

批改：purpose 应为复数 purposes。

原文：.Enjoining scenery takes the lead at 37%,follwed

批改：Enjoining 拼写错误，应为 Enjoying。 follwed 拼写错误，应为 followed。

原文：eliving p

批改：reliving 用词不当，"relive"意为“再次经历”，这里想表达“缓解”，应为 relieving

原文：Additional

批改：Additional 应为副词 Additionally

原文：,independence ability and others are also considered ,accounting for 9%,6%,and 15 %

批改：independence ability 搭配不自然，应为 cultivating independence 或 developing independent skills。 15 %respectively 应空格，15% respectively。

原文： pie chart clearly displays the percentage breakdown of various purpose of traveling among students at a certain university .Enjoining scenery takes the lead at 37%,follwed by reliving pressure at 33%.Additional ,factors such as making friends ,independence ability and others are also considered ,accounting for 9%,6%,and 15 %respectively .

批改：述段涵盖了所有要点，但存在一些影响准确性的拼写和用词错误

原文：he wak of the high -speed

批改：In the wak of 拼写错误，应为 In the wake of。 high -speed 连字符多余，应为 high-speed。

原文：,they also

批改：, they also... 前面是逗号，但前后是两个完整句子，这是典型的串句错误，应使用句号断开。

原文：stayin

批改：staying school 缺介词，应为 staying at school。

原文：,as saying goes

批改：as saying goes 缺冠词，应为 As the saying goes。 reliving 依旧错误，应为 relieving。 in the table 图表类型错误，这是饼图，应为 in the chart。

原文：e core reason for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows .To start with ,In the wak of the high -speed advancement of society ,university students are no longer content with mere material satisfaction ,they also pursue spiritual enjoyment ,This explains why an increasing number of university students choose to enjoy scenery rather than staying school .In addition ,as saying goes ,”on life’s stage,pressure is always present .”Nowadays ,university students are compelled to confront immense academic pressure ,and as a result ,reliving pressure by traveling has emerged as their significant choice for utilizing leisure time .Considering these factors ,the depicted phenomenon in the table is unsurprising.

批改：论证角度选择得当，逻辑是通的，这非常好！但语法错误和拼写错误较多

原文：statistics figu

批改：statistics figure 搭配不当，statistics 是学科或数据集合，figure 指数字，这里直接用 statistical figures 或 data 即可。

原文：at about future trends ?I am confident that the above statistics figure accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of university students,serving as a microcosm of the changes in the era ,and will likely remain relatively stable in the following decades .

批改：结尾段不错，预测合理

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10分

优点：结构完整，覆盖所有要点，论证逻辑相关且有一定深度。

主要失分点：全篇存在较多拼写、用词和语法错误（尤其是串句和介词缺失），影响了表达的准确性与流畅度。

总评与修改建议：

当前，制约你分数进一步提升的，依然是语言。

给你两条建议：

建立“高频错误清单”：请将你反复出现的错误（如relieve/relive, staying at school, the chart/table）和本篇文章的新错误（如Enjoining/Enjoying, In the wake of）整理在一个小本子上。每次写作前看一遍，写作后按清单检查。

学会自我检查串句：写完每句话后，检查它是否只有一个主语和一个谓语（从句除外）。如果发现两个完整句子只用逗号连接，立即修改：可以拆成两句，或者用连词连接。

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