考研英语二2016年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2016年考研英语二备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语二大作文话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语二高分写作模板。

一、考研英语二2016年大作文题目

考研英语二2016年大作文Write an essay based on the chart below. In your writing, you should1) interpret the chart, and2) give your comments.You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET.

二、考研英语二2016年大作文批改例文

This a pie chart, clearly illustrating the reasons why high students at a certain university travel. 37% of collage college students take a trip for sightseeing,while another 33% students take a journey to relieve stress. By contrast, the figures for the other three project only account for 30%

This phenomenon can be attributed to the following factors. One of the major reasons is that students can increase knowledge and expand horizons when they enjoy the landscape. In short-term, it is beneficial to their academic research and their career development in long-term. In addition, university students are faced with fierce social competition and strain. Travelling serves as a way for them to relax, so they will feel reflashed when returning to campus.

It is estimated that travelling will be increasingly become a popularity among college students. It is exceedingly necessary for travel firms to offer travel

plans at a reasonable price for university students.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：少is

原文：high

批改：university

原文：collage

批改：删去

原文：project

批改：复数

原文：This a pie chart, clearly illustrating the reasons why high students at a certain university travel. 37% of collage college students take a trip for sightseeing,while another 33% students take a journey to relieve stress. By contrast, the figures for the other three project only account for 30%

批改：在描述图表信息时要注意语言的准确性。

原文：reflashed

批改：refreshed

原文：his phenomenon can be attributed to the following factors. One of the major reasons is that students can increase knowledge and expand horizons when they enjoy the landscape. In short-term, it is beneficial to their academic research and their career development in long-term. In addition, university students are faced with fierce social competition and strain. Travelling serves as a way for them to relax, so they will feel reflashed when returning to campus.

批改：能够运用逻辑关系词分析图表中现象的背后原因，全面细致。

原文：be

批改：这句话两个动词，去掉be

原文：It is estimated that travelling will be increasingly become a popularity among college students. It is exceedingly necessary for travel firms to offer travel plans at a reasonable price for university students.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行分析总结并提出自己的建议。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误，名词单复数使用正确；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变，但是要注意句子结构的完整；语法方面，注意一句话只能有一个谓语。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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