考研英语一2016年大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

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一、考研英语一2016年大作文题目

考研英语一2016年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2016年大作文批改例文

In the left-hand, there is a father watching a TV and commanding his son to study hard. On the contrary,in the right-hand picture, a father accompanies his child to strive to study.Evidently, the picture intends to convey to readers that positive examples are the brush that paints a bright future for children,while negative examples are the shackle that hinders children’s progress.

The phenomenon is thought-provoking in many ways, but two of them are particularly significant.On the one hand,following positive examples can nurture children’s souls and promote their growth and self-fulfillment,thus making life rewarding and meaningful, rather than being self-consuming.On the other hand, negative examples are like heavy chains that hinder children’s progress, leaving them with a negative outlook on life and preventing them from shining brightly in future society.

In brief, positive examples are the catalyst for children’s development,from which they all stand to benefit. Therefore ,we should actively promote and support this practice;additionally, we must be aware of the detrimental effects of negative examples to ensure children’s growth stays on course.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文： left-hand

批改：改为 left-hand picture

原文： a

批改：删去

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图画内容, 表达的主题和图画也是贴合的

批改：语法正确

批改：语法正确，表达也很好

批改：内容表达很好，也很具体

批改：语法正确

批改：结尾段内容表达很好

原文：commanding

批改："commanding" 语气非常强硬，带有“命令、指挥”的意味。改为 telling 或 ordering 会更常用。

原文：accompanies his child to strive to study

批改：表述有些冗长且生硬， 改为 is studying with his child

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：16分/20分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明了个人观点，和图画的内容很贴合

语言表达：存在几处语法问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改，要细心。之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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