2015年考研英语二大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2015年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二真题教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、2015年考研英语二大作文题目

考研英语二2015年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart, and 2) give your comments. You should write about 150 words on the ANSWER SHEET. (15 points)

二、2015年考研英语二大作文批改例文

The pie chare clearly displays the percentage breakdown of a city civic"s spending in Chinese traditional year. The new year gifts takes the lead at 40%, followed by transportation、 eating with friends or family at 20% respectively.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people"s attitudes towards of consumption have undergone significant changes, people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue spiritual enjoyment. This explains why an increasing number of people choose buy new year gifts to share with friends. In addition, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our goverment has made tremendous effort to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of populace, allowing them to afford previous gifts. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of residents. Serving as a microcosm of changes in the era, and will likely remain stable in the following decades.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The pie chare clearly displays the percentage breakdown of a city civic"s spending in Chinese traditional year. The new year gifts takes the lead at 40%, followed by transportation、 eating with friends or family at 20% respectively.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：of

批改：of多余，去掉

批改：两个动词不能连用，用非谓语to连接

原文：effort

批改：efforts复数

原文：previous

批改：previous是以前的意思，含义这里不合适

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people"s attitudes towards of consumption have undergone significant changes, people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also pursue spiritual enjoyment. This explains why an increasing number of people choose buy new year gifts to share with friends. In addition, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our goverment has made tremendous effort to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of populace, allowing them to afford previous gifts. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义，能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子，使得句与句之间衔接连贯，望继续保持。

原文：and

批改：后缺少主语

原文：What about future trends? I am confident that the above statistical figures accurately and truthfully reflect the choices of residents. Serving as a microcosm of changes in the era, and will likely remain stable in the following decades.

批改：能够对图表中的现象进行总结和预测，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，注意名词单复数的正确使用以及单词含义的正确选取；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变；语法方面，注意一句话只能有一个谓语，以及句子成分完整，不要缺少成分。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免小的语法错误。再接再厉。

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