考研英语一2011年大作文考了什么？附真题回顾及例文批改

启航教育作为考研英语培训领域的知名品牌，每年都会整理发布当年的考研英语作文模板高分范文。本文呈现的2011年考研英语一大作文批改例文中，每一处失分点都已被老师精准订正，是2027考生不可错过的写作资料。

一、考研英语一2011年大作文题目

考研英语一2011年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and3) give your comments.You should write neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2011年大作文批改例文

As shown of this picture there is a boat on the water. three people on the boat one people rowing boat but other two people throw the rubbish in the water. Near the boat too many rubbish on the water. Evidently the picture intends to convey to readers that throw the rubbish in everywhere in the trip is an issue that require great attention both in our personal lives and society.

This phenomonon is thought-provoking in several ways. but two of them are particularly signifuicant. On the one hand, we must protect the environment, we go to trip where is other people live here. we throw the rubbish everywhere destroy local environment and destory habitane live. On the other hand, This act reflect our lack of education. Luck of education can harm relationships, erode thrust and respect, and cause the loss of opportunities and resource. It can also damage personal lmage and reputation, leading to exclusion and failure in work and social situations.

How can we put an end to the problem of throw the rubbish everywhere? It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including enhance supervision. and instill the idea of protect environment into students. But would these measures be comprehensive enough? In reality, we also with need to strengthen self-discipline. with the Supports of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its once.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：As shown of this picture there is a boat on the water.

批改：“As shown of”表述错误，正确用法是“As shown in”。

原文：three people on the boat one people rowing boat but other two people throw the rubbish in the water.

批改：句子结构混乱，缺少必要的连接词和标点。“one people”表述错误，应是“one person”；“throw the rubbish in the water”中“in”使用不当，应是“into”。

原文：Near the boat too many rubbish on the water.

批改：句子缺少谓语动词，表达不完整。

原文：Evidently the picture intends to convey to readers that throw the rubbish in everywhere in the trip is an issue that require great attention both in our personal lives and society.

批改：“throw the rubbish in everywhere”表述错误，应是“throwing rubbish everywhere”；“require”主谓不一致，应改为“requires”

原文：This phenomonon is thought-provoking in several ways. but two of them are particularly signifuicant.

批改：“phenomonon”拼写错误，应是“phenomenon”；“signifuicant”拼写错误，应是“significant”

原文：On the one hand, we must protect the environment, we go to trip where is other people live here.

批改：句子结构混乱，“we go to trip where is other people live here”表述错误且语义不通。 建议：改为“On the one hand, we must protect the environment. When we go on a trip, we are visiting places where other people live.”

原文：we throw the rubbish everywhere destroy local environment and destory habitane live.

批改：句子结构混乱，“destroy”和“destory”拼写错误，应是“destroy”；“habitane live”表述错误，应是“habitats”。 建议：改为“If we throw rubbish everywhere, we will destroy the local environment and habitats.”

原文：On the other hand, This act reflect our lack of education.

批改：“This”首字母不应大写；“reflect”主谓不一致，应改为“reflects”。

原文：Luck of education can harm relationships, erode thrust and respect, and cause the loss of opportunities and resource.

批改：“Luck”拼写错误，应是“Lack”；“thrust”拼写错误，应是“trust”；“resource”应是复数形式“resources”。

原文：It can also damage personal lmage and reputation, leading to exclusion and failure in work and social situations.

批改：“lmage”拼写错误，应是“image”。

原文：How can we put an end to the problem of throw the rubbish everywhere?

批改：“throw”应改为“throwing”。

原文：It is suggested by many that we need a package deal, including enhance supervision. and instill the idea of protect environment into students.

批改：“enhance”应改为“enhancing”；“protect”应改为“protecting”

原文：But would these measures be comprehensive enough?

批改：此句表述较为清晰，提出疑问，引发思考。

原文：In reality, we also with need to strengthen self-discipline.

批改：“with”使用错误，多余。

原文：with the Supports of these measures, we can effectively tackle the issue at its once.

批改：“with”首字母不应大写；“Supports”拼写错误，应是“Support”；“at its once”表述错误，应是“at once”。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：8/20

题目要求：试图按照题目要求，从描述漫画、解释寓意以及给出评论这三个方面展开写作，体现了对题目指令的基本理解，试图构建一个完整的论述结构。

语言表达：部分语句能够表达出一定的核心意思，例如试图阐述乱扔垃圾这一现象及其影响，但是存在大量主谓不一致、时态错误、词性误用等问题。如“three people on the boat one people rowing boat”中，不仅句子结构混乱，“one people”表述错误；“throw the rubbish in the water”里“in”使用不当；“require”在“that require great attention”中主谓不一致，应改为“requires”。

内容层面：能够识别出漫画所反映的乱扔垃圾这一社会现象，并尝试从保护环境和缺乏教育两个角度去分析该现象的影响。

修改建议：系统复习英语语法知识，包括时态、主谓一致、句子结构、词性等，通过做专项练习来巩固。多阅读优秀的英语范文，学习地道的英语表达方式和句式结构。在日常写作中，尝试模仿范文的表达，逐渐提高自己的语言运用能力。

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