考研英语二2011年大作文实例分析与批改

备战2011年考研英语大作文，先从研读经典高分范文开始。本文汇集的启航教育批改范文中，不仅有原文、批注，还有词汇注释与亮点解析。准备2027考研的同学，可联系启航教育在线咨询考研英语二写作高分规划。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The line chart clearly depicts the sale of different brands car in China. In 2008, the percentage of nation brands was 25, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to around 37. In contrast, the proportion of Japan brands experienced a significant decline of about 15% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brands remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to build a sound car market system, enabling car manufacturers to have ample opportunities for further development. In addition, against the backdrop of our country’s rapid any dynamic development, the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic car and have become the primary consumer group. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the char is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of nation car sale will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japan car sale will likely to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The line chart clearly depicts the sale of different brands car in China.

批改：单复数 + 所有格错误，“销量” 常用复数 “sales”，“不同品牌的汽车” 需用 “cars of different brands” 或 “different brands’ cars”，整句修正为 “The line chart clearly depicts the sales of cars of different brands in China”（“sales” 更贴合 “销量” 含义，表达更地道）。

原文：25

批改：缺少单位%

原文：37

批改：缺少单位%

原文：nation brands

批改：“国产品牌” 标准表达是 “domestic brands” 或 “national brands”

原文：rate

批改：指代不当，“rate” 侧重 “比率”，此处指 “市场份额占比”，改为 “this proportion” 更准确。

原文：Japan

批改：词性错误，需用形容词 “Japanese” 修饰 “brands”

原文：any

批改：and

原文：domestic car

批改：domestic cars

原文：are accustomed to using domestic car and

批改：逻辑稍弱，结合 “年轻一代成为主力消费者”，改为 “prefer domestic cars”（“更偏好” 更贴合消费选择的语境）。

原文：char

批改：chart

原文：nation car sale

批改：domestic car sales

原文：Japan car sale

批改：同前错误，改为 “Japanese car sales”

原文：will likely to decrease

批改：语法错误，“likely” 是形容词，“will” 后接动词原形，应改为 “will likely decrease”（删去多余的 “to”），或调整为 “is likely to decrease”。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9分

这篇作文的框架特别清晰！能看出你牢牢抓住了 “折线图解读→原因分析→趋势预测” 的核心思路，准确提炼了 “国产品牌销量上升、日系品牌下降、美系品牌稳定” 的图表核心信息，完全完成了题目要求的 “解读图表 + 发表评论” 任务，这点值得好好肯定！

不过，文章里的 “小失误” 主要集中在 “基础语法” 和 “词汇用法” 上～ 比如 “sales” 漏写复数、“Japanese brands” 错写成 “Japan brands”、“chart” 拼成 “char”，这些大多是 “粗心拼写” 或 “单复数 / 词性混淆” 的问题，下次写完不妨花 2 分钟逐句检查：① 名词单复数（比如 “销量 sales、汽车 cars”）；② 形容词修饰名词（比如 “日本的 Japanese、国产的 domestic”）；③ 关键单词拼写（比如 “chart、and”），这些错误其实很容易修正～

另外，论述的 “贴合度” 可以再提升！比如分析国产品牌销量上升的原因时，只说 “政府建立健全市场体系” 有点空泛，不如结合实际商业场景补充一句 “国产汽车在技术、性价比上的进步，也让年轻消费者更愿意选择”，这样论述会更有说服力，也更贴合 “汽车销量变化” 的主题～

整体来说，你的写作逻辑和框架已经很稳了，只要把这些 “语言细节” 打磨好，分数肯定能往上提一大截！

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