考研英语二2011年大作文怎么写？附例文批改

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一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts different proportions of cars’ brands in the national from 2008 to 2009. In 2008, the percentage of made in China was approximately 25%, but by 2009, this rate had substantially risen to 32%. In contrast, the proportion of made in Japane experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of made in America remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my vies, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China’s manufacturing of cars industry in responding to these changes. In addition, in the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people are no longer content with mere material satisfaction; they also purse patriotic spirit. This explains why an increasing rate of people choose made in China rather than made in Iapane or America. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of made in China is a clear sign of social improvement and will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of made in Japane or America will likely continue decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：made in China

批改：of 后面不能直接加过去分词，此处为名词或者动名词短语，改为 cars made in China

原文：made

批改：改为 cars made

原文：Japane

批改：Japan

原文：made

批改：改为 cars made

原文：national

批改：此处为名词短语，改为 national market

批改：开头段表达不错，清晰地阐述了图表内容

批改：语法正确

原文：vies

批改：view

原文：manufacturing of cars

批改：改为 car manufacturing 即可，表达更简洁

原文：purse

批改：pursue

原文：made

批改：改为 cars made

原文： made

批改：改为 cars made

原文：Iapane

批改：Japan

批改：内容表达不错，也比较具体

原文：made

批改：改为 cars made

原文：made

批改：改为 cars made

原文：Japane

批改：Japan

原文：continue decrease

批改：continue to do sth, 改为 continue to decrease

批改：结尾段内容表达不错，预测也很合理

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：10分/ 15分

题目要求：总体上来说是切题的，表明的个人观点与图表的内容是贴合的

语言表达：存在几处语法和拼写问题，词汇表达不错，一些句式表达也很好

结构逻辑：文章的结构完整清晰，内容也比较丰富具体

修改建议：1. 语法问题结合作文批注仔细修改 2.拼写要细心，之后可以多积累素材，自己多练练句子，进一步丰富自己的句式和观点储备，提高自己的语言表达，总的来说写的不错，加油！

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