考研英语二2011年大作文真题与例文批改

一篇高分的考研英语大作文，常常具备结构清晰、句式多变、词汇地道三大特点。本文精解的2011年考研英语二批改范例，每一段都体现了这三大要素，启航教育考研英语二写作冲刺教研组对该范文进行了详细的亮点标注。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart clearly depicts our nation"s market proportion of car brands . In 2008, the percentage of Chinese brand was approximately 25%, but by 2009, the rate had substantially risen to around 30%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same time. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of the populace, allowing them to afford automobiles that were previously deemed luxury items. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in response to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon is unsurprising.

What about the future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：The bar chart clearly depicts our nation"s market proportion of car brands . In 2008, the percentage of Chinese brand was approximately 25%, but by 2009, the rate had substantially risen to around 30%. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand experienced a significant decline of about 10% during the same time. Simultaneously, the percentage of American brand remained stable and steady.

批改：能够准确地描绘出图表的信息，句子连贯完整。

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, as the conductor orchestrating the symphony of changes, our government has made tremendous efforts to drive economic growth and elevate the purchasing power of the populace, allowing them to afford automobiles that were previously deemed luxury items. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in response to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon is unsurprising.

批改：能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义，能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子，使得句与句之间衔接连贯，望继续保持。

原文：What about the future trends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand will likely continue to decrease.

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：13/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，无拼写错误；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变；语法方面，总体来看语法基础没有问题。

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。

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