考研英语一2010年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语一大作文每年的命题都会折射出当年的社会热点。本文呈现的2010年考研英语一批改范例，从生活实际出发，紧扣命题意图。启航教育老师在批注中详细指出了图（表）描述、原因分析与建议评论的合理答题节奏。

一、考研英语一2010年大作文题目

考研英语一2010年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2010年大作文批改例文

As shown in the cartoon, there is a hot pot includes many aspects of cultures, which makes it look very "delicious" and "nutritive". Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it are many cultures that play an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particicularly significant. On the one hand, both Chinese traditional cultures and Western good cultures can enlarge our scope of knowledge and broaden our horizons. On the other hand, nowadays we can learn many kinds of information and views from the Internet at the same time. We must learn how to identify whether it is a good culture, instead of accepting all of them without thinking twice.

In brief, learning good culture is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively. promote and carry forward good culture. Only by doing so can we develop individual potential.

三、考研英语作文批改

原文：includes many aspects of cultures

批改：including/ that includes many cultural elements

原文：nutritive

批改：nutrious

原文： are many cultures

批改：主题是文化融合，cultural integration

原文： play

批改：plays

原文：As shown in the cartoon, there is a hot pot includes many aspects of cultures, which makes it look very "delicious" and "nutritive". Evidently, the cartoonist intends to convey to readers that it are many cultures that play an important and positive role both in our personal lives and in society.

批改：意思对，注意语法错误。

原文： particicularly

批改：particularly

原文：This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways, but two of them are particicularly significant. On the one hand, both Chinese traditional cultures and Western good cultures can enlarge our scope of knowledge and broaden our horizons. On the other hand, nowadays we can learn many kinds of information and views from the Internet at the same time. We must learn how to identify whether it is a good culture, instead of accepting all of them without thinking twice.

批改：这一段尽量往文化融合上写，文化火锅代表的主题已经十分明显，就是融合，而且都是优化文化，不用辨别。

原文：learning good culture

批改：cultural integration

批改：去掉句号

原文：good culture

批改：cultural integration

原文：In brief, learning good culture is the catalyst for societal and personal development, from which we all stand to benefit. Therefore, we should actively. promote and carry forward good culture. Only by doing so can we develop individual potential.

批改：good

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：11/20分。

1. 题目要求：作文内容包含全面，层次分明，但不够切题，要牢牢抓住文化融合的主题；

2. 语言表达：运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇，强调句，定语从句，非谓语结构和倒装句型很棒；

3. 行文逻辑：采用恰当的衔接手法，行文流畅，内容连贯；

4. 建议：要深刻吃透老师的模板，使用自己的语言，灵活运用在各类题目中，进一步丰富自己的语料库和写作思路，加油！

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