考研英语一2010年大作文真题与例文批改

考研英语作文失分点多、提分空间大，一直是2010年考研英语一备考生核心痛点之一。本文围绕考研英语一作文真题话题，给出一篇经过启航教育老师精细批改的高分范文，文中不仅有逐句批注，还附有可复制的考研英语一高分写作模板。

一、考研英语一2010年大作文题目

考研英语一2010年大作文Directions:Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should1) describe the drawing briefly,2) explain its intended meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)

二、考研英语一2010年大作文批改例文

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As shown in the cartoon there is a big hot-pot, being boiled and being full of many cultural factors which come from many countries from the world, such as kungfu, modern poem, and works of William Shakespeare. Evidently, the cartunist intends to convey to us that it is diverse culture that plays significant role both in personal lives and in society.

This phenomenon is throught-provking in many ways, but two of them are particularly significant. On the one hand, diverse culture could nurture personal souls, promote personal progress and self-fullfillment, thus making the life awarding and meaningful rather than self-consuming. On the other hand, neglecting culture is like a heavy shackle that hinders social progress, not only hindering its ability to maintain public moral health, but also significantly affecting its international image and competitiveness.

Therefore, diverse culture is the catalyst for personal and social development, from which we all stand to benefit. We should actively promote and carry diverse culture. Only by doing so can we create a happier life, build a more harmonious society and make our culture shine with renewed brillance.

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三、考研英语作文批改

原文：As shown in the cartoon

批改：后面应该加个逗号，

原文：cartunist

批改：cartoonist

原文：plays significant role

批改：应该是plays a significant role

原文：throught-provking

批改：thought-provoking

原文：self-fullfillment

批改：self-fulfillment

原文：On the other hand, neglecting culture is like a heavy shackle that hinders social progress, not only hindering its ability to maintain public moral health, but also significantly affecting its international image and competitiveness

批改：需要注意的是。前面在说文化多元性，这里说忽视文化的后果，这个漫画强调的是多元文化/文化融合。这里有点轻微逻辑偏差，最好改为文化单一性会xxx或者忽视文化融合会xxx

原文：brillance.

批改：brilliance

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：14/20

题目要求：整体还不错，第一段简要描述了漫画并揭示了其寓意；第二段阐述了文化的重要性；第三段总结并发出呼吁。结构完整，符合题目要求。

语言表达：同学的语言表达流畅，使用了丰富的词汇和较复杂的句子结构，显示出一定的英语水平。使用的词汇都优秀，文章中的大部分语言表达是准确的，能够清晰地传达意思。但是存在一些拼写问题和语法问题需要注意。

行文逻辑：文章按照描述图像、分析重要性、总结呼吁的顺序展开，结构清晰。过渡较为自然。内容上也都非常合适，和题目的信息点相关性很高。但是需要注意你的论述内容应该聚焦在文化多元上，第二段的第二个论点只在说文化，有点逻辑偏差。

建议：同学这篇文章完成度很好，不难看出私下有积累一些好词好句，也建议同学尽快将这些好词好句内化为自己的。一定要自己写文章练习作文，自己写完之后再去借鉴范文，学习范文的优秀表达，这样会更快提升，能在正式考试中根据不同的题目要求写出更切题的文章。另外关于文章内出现的错误需要留心，每次写完之后养成通篇读一遍的习惯，在读的过程中就专注抓语法错误、拼写错误。这些不必要犯的错误一定要扼杀掉！

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