考研英语二2011年大作文失分点批改

本文是一份经过启航教育整理的2011年考研英语二大作文批改资料，对照考研英语作文万能句型写作框架与评分标准进行精细讲解。无论是词汇句式、段落衔接还是逻辑展开，本文都能为考研英语考生提供可直接套用的范例。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

The bar chart above, as is specially shown presents the statistics concerning the market changes of some car brands in the civil car in 2008 and 2009. Based on the chart, the proportion of Chinese brand has increased from 25% to 30% during the years spanning from 2008 to 2009. However, the proportion of Japanese brand went up from 35% to 25%. Obviously, it is the best ways of depicting a heated topic, namely,"With the development of technology, Chinese brand are getting better and better.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society in undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. In addition. In the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people"s attitudes towards of Chinese brand car have undergone significant changes. This explains why an increasingly number of people choose Chinese brand rather than Japanese brand. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

What about future frends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand will likely continue to decrease.

三、考研英语作文批改

批改：加逗号断句

批改：加market

原文：up

批改：down下降

原文：ways

批改：单数way

原文：are

批改：brand是单数，are改成is

原文：The bar chart above, as is specially shown presents the statistics concerning the market changes of some car brands in the civil car in 2008 and 2009. Based on the chart, the proportion of Chinese brand has increased from 25% to 30% during the years spanning from 2008 to 2009. However, the proportion of Japanese brand went up from 35% to 25%. Obviously, it is the best ways of depicting a heated topic, namely,"With the development of technology, Chinese brand are getting better and better.

批改：能够清晰的描绘图表中展现的内容，内容完整，注意避免小的语言错误。

原文：in

批改：is

批改：逗号

原文：In

批改：in小写

原文：of

批改：of多余删去

原文：increasingly

批改：increasing

原文：he core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, Chinese society in undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacturing industry in responding to these changes. In addition. In the wake of the high-speed advancement of society, people"s attitudes towards of Chinese brand car have undergone significant changes. This explains why an increasingly number of people choose Chinese brand rather than Japanese brand. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：能够具体阐释出图表背后的真实意义，能够运用逻辑关系词连接句子，使得句与句之间衔接连贯，望继续保持。

原文：frends

批改：trends

原文：What about future frends? I am confident that the proportion of Chinese brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japanese brand will likely continue to decrease.

批改：分析并预测了未来的趋势，言简意赅。

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：9/15

1）内容符合题目的要求，能够准确全面的描绘出图表中的内容。

2）词汇方面，基础词汇一定要避免拼写错误，名词单复数要使用正确以及正确区分单词词性及其用法；句式方面，能够运用一些复杂句式，句型结构灵活多变，但是要注意正确使用标点断句；

3）逻辑结构清晰完整，论证较为充分。能够运用一些逻辑关系词来连接句子，符合英语句子结构的要求。

4）修改建议：可以看出作文完成的很认真，内容充分，语言逻辑清晰，值得表扬。一定要细心一些，注意避免以上小的细节问题。再接再厉。

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