作为考研英语备考的核心模块,2017年考研英语一大作文承载了大量学生的提分期待。本文带来的这篇批改例文,紧扣考研英语一作文模板常见话题,由启航教育资深英语教研团队逐句批改,详细标注语法、词汇与逻辑三大失分点,是考研英语写作提分的优质资料。
一、考研英语一2017年大作文题目
考研英语一2017年大作文52. Directions: Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following pictures. In your essay, you should1) describe the pictures briefly, 2) interpret the meaning, and 3) give your comments. You should write neatly on the ANSWER SHEET. (20 points)
二、考研英语一2017年大作文批改例文
In the left-hand picture, there is a man lying on a seat and saying that he has a lot of books without reading them.In the right-hand picture there is a man sitting down at his desk,reading a book and planning to read at least 20 books this year.Evidently, the picture intends to convey to readers that how intelligent a person is depends on how many books he had read instead of how many he has now.
This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways,but two of them are particularly significant.On the one hand,in our history there were countless people who were born into rich families with mountains of books but became ordinary in the end because they never read the books.On the other hand,there are also plenty of stories praising the poor who changed their fate by seizing every chance to read.
In brief, keeping reading is the catalyst for personal development,from which we all stand to benefit.Therefore,we should actively support and advocate this practice.Additionally,we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of buying books but never reading them to ensure our growth stays on course.
三、考研英语作文批改
原文:had
批改:has 现在完成时
原文:In the left-hand picture, there is a man lying on a seat and saying that he has a lot of books without reading them.In the right-hand picture there is a man sitting down at his desk,reading a book and planning to read at least 20 books this year.Evidently, the picture intends to convey to readers that how intelligent a person is depends on how many books he had read instead of how many he has now.
批改:建议往行动和空想方面写
原文:This phenomenon is thought-provoking in several ways,but two of them are particularly significant.On the one hand,in our history there were countless people who were born into rich families with mountains of books but became ordinary in the end because they never read the books.On the other hand,there are also plenty of stories praising the poor who changed their fate by seizing every chance to read.
批改:观点,词汇和句型很棒
原文:In brief, keeping reading is the catalyst for personal development,from which we all stand to benefit.Therefore,we should actively support and advocate this practice.Additionally,we must be acutely aware of the detrimental effects of buying books but never reading them to ensure our growth stays on course.
批改:正反对比,升华主题
四、考研英语作文评分
得分:15/20分。
1. 同学你好,这里有书和读书,更偏向强调务实与空谈,计划与行动。写成阅读对人的成长作用感觉不是很合适,所以不敢给你太高的分数;
2. 语言表达:运用复杂的语法结构和高级词汇,定语从句,状语从句,非谓语结构和宾语从句句型很棒;
3. 行文逻辑:采用恰当的衔接手法,行文流畅,内容连贯;
4. 建议:原创度很高,思路很清晰,值得肯定,要进一步背诵优秀词句,积累素材,加油!
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