考研英语二2011年大作文真题与例文批改

启航教育考研英语教研组精心筛选了2011年考研英语二大作文真题原文及高分批改范例。本篇范文中，老师对每一句都给出修改建议，是考研英语二真题备考资料库中的精品，特别推荐给参加2027考研的学子。

一、考研英语二2011年大作文题目

考研英语二2011年大作文Write an essay based on the following chart. In your writing, you should 1) interpret the chart and 2) give your comments. You should write at least 150 words. Write your essay on ANSWER SHEET 2. (15 points)

二、考研英语二2011年大作文批改例文

必须使用黑色字迹书写:在答题卡区域内作答,超出黑色矩形边框限定区域的答案无效。 The bar chart clearly depicts proportion of some domestic car in 2008 and 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic brand was 25%, but by 2009, this rate had gradually risen to 30%. In contrast, the percentage of Japen"s brand decline of 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American’s brand remained stable and steady.

The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic brand car and have become the primary consumer group. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacting industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

what about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japen"s brand will likely continue to decrease.

必须使用黑色字迹书写:在答题卡区域内作答,超出黑色矩形边框限定区域的答案无效

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三、考研英语作文批改

原文：car

批改：cars

原文：Japen"s

批改：Japanese

原文：decline of

批改：declined

原文：American’s

批改：American

原文： The bar chart clearly depicts proportion of some domestic car in 2008 and 2009. In 2008, the percentage of domestic brand was 25%, but by 2009, this rate had gradually risen to 30%. In contrast, the percentage of Japen"s brand decline of 10% during the same period. Simultaneously, the percentage of American’s brand remained stable and steady.

批改：用具体数据描述图表内容，清晰直观，但是建议在段落后面补充这些数据反映的社会现象

原文：The core reasons for the observed phenomenon can be summarized as follows. To start with, against the backdrop of our country"s rapid and dynamic development the younger generation, particularly those born in the 1990s and 2000s, are accustomed to using domestic brand car and have become the primary consumer group. In addition, Chinese society is undergoing an extensive and profound transformation. In my view, the fundamental reason for this phenomenon is the significant progress made by China"s manufacting industry in responding to these changes. Considering these factors, the depicted phenomenon in the chart is unsurprising.

批改：以分论点的形式论述这一现象背后的原因，逻辑严谨，层次分明。

原文：what

批改：首字母大写

原文：what about future trends? I am confident that the proportion of domestic brand will steadily increase in the following decades. In contrast, the proportion of Japen"s brand will likely continue to decrease.

批改：总结全文，升华主题，展望未来，立意深远。

原文：Japen"s

批改：Japanese

四、考研英语作文评分

得分：12 /15

这篇文章内容完整充实，结构清晰合理，逻辑严谨，层次分明，句型表达丰富。

词汇：考试时可以多积累高级词汇，写作文就能用上，但尤其注意单词拼写不要出现明显错误，特别是与主题词相关的单词要重点留意。

内容：在第二段分析原因时，我们可以有两个选择，一是只分析中国品牌占比上升的原因，二是可以加上日本品牌占比下降的原因，关于日本品牌占比下降的原因，可以写日本品牌一些不当行为导致其声誉下降，进而影响其销量等原因。

整体来看，主要是细节错误，但要多用自己的语言去进行表达，避免和范文重复，后续继续注重练习，加油！

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